|Reviews for The Vampire Mansion|
| L. Valdez chapter 22 . 9/20/2009
I really enjoyed this. Definitely keep writing and good luck getting published. I look forward to seeing your books in the stores ;)
| L. Valdez chapter 1 . 9/19/2009
I freakin' love your whole Dip-Your-Own-Dog concept, it is hilarious.
| Sakiru Yume chapter 22 . 4/26/2009
I enjoyed this story. I really want to read a sequel to this, so do you know if there would be any way for you to just send this to me? I wouldn't show it to anyone or anything, but I just liked the story and didn't like that it just ended. I want more.
| Carmel March chapter 22 . 4/13/2009
Wow, fantastic ending to this story. I see you have a second part, so I'm off to read that!
| deleted'acc2 chapter 22 . 3/30/2009
I just read al of it and it was great! I'd love to read a Vampire Mansion 2.0!
| darkflare782 chapter 22 . 3/30/2009
Ok finally found my info so I could log on again. Well anyways loved the story so much but one question does don ever get to see erik again?
| Systatic chapter 22 . 3/27/2009
It was absolutely lovely-the epilogue gives a great build up to a sequel, one that I eagerly await. I could go on and on and on about all the fantastic points of your story but that would just waste your time.
I understand about removing Christy from the next draft-I personally didn't see much of a need to have her in there, and I can relate to your feelings about wanting to keep David gay, but more readers will be attracted without that in there.
I can't wait to see the new developments on Erik and Don and how you'll be developing their roles. I didn't see much of a character flaw in Erik, one that I was looking for throughout the entire story. I hope I'll see more of that weakness (aside from his weakness for Don; how cute!) in the next one. Also, it seemed like Jared wasn't characterized as "scary" enough for me. It might be my thrill-seeking tendencies, but I didn't feel like Don and Erik feared him enough in relation to all the atrocious acts he committed, aside from her reaction when she first found out that it was him who murdered Julie.
You created a wonderfully strong female protagonist, though; I can truthfully say that I adore you for doing that (and I loved the little episodes about her awful job at Dip-Your-Own-Dog!)
All of that aside, you did a great job. I'm half asleep so my review won't contain nearly everything that I want it to but hopefully I got the gist of what I wanted to say down.
I'll put you down for my Author Alert so I can keep up with any new entries that you put out.
Best of luck and happy writing,
| Nerdillicous chapter 22 . 3/27/2009
U loved this story...u had a few grammar errors but thats kewl. I really hope you will post the sequel because I want them to get together. I have started a story of my own n ill hope youll read it
| TheWiseBoob chapter 20 . 3/25/2009
I'd first like to just say thanks for that little message because you see i added ur story before fiction press decided to do all their reformatting and for some reason they've decided that they do not want me to read any of the stories i added before that point in time and therefore they don't send me alerts when an of u guys up date; so i didn't actually know u had updated the last however many chapters... :\, yeah i'm a little burnt about all that… anyway!
I do in fact like you story it's very simple (And i don't mean "simple" as in dull or silly) but that it flows nicely and that u don't get stuck for a however long playing connect the plot dots like sometimes happens in other stories where authors try to confuse us into submission... the jerks, anyway it has a very smooth gait that makes it easy to fallow and that u want to keep reading.
On the flip of that (cause i read once you should add a positive and a negative to every review) is that you could add a little bit more of your characters point of view of the situations she's in... after all that's the fun thing about books is that you get to explore more of what ur characters thinking and feeling, it's why the book will ALWAYS be better than the movie ;)
That’s it from me then. keep up the good work and i'll try to remember to check ur story manually in cause FP decides it still doesn’t want to keep me up to date... tah-tah!
The W.B. *
| WHAT chapter 20 . 3/21/2009
WHAT? What? NO! Please update soon! I MUST know whats gonna happen next!
PEople - REVIEW!
| Kyrina chapter 19 . 1/26/2009
oh i hope she turns into a vampire! lol, good chapter!
| darkflare782 chapter 19 . 12/23/2008
OMG so awsome!
| Kaley chapter 18 . 12/20/2008
I love this story so much!
Please update it soon. ]
| QuirkyGurl chapter 18 . 12/15/2008
The story is building up to something :D !
You have 30 reviews good sir, post the next chapter. lol.
I have been reading this for hours xd
| Barbi chapter 18 . 12/3/2008
hi, i read vampire mansion while in my computer class and i have to say that it seriously kicks ass! this is one of the best online stories taht i have ever read. please keep it up!