Hmm... I like the word Hmm... But that's exactly what i thought when I read this. In a deep sort of hmm... not a "this is terrible" sort of hmm... So hmm...

i really enjoyed reading this piece. it made me feel like i'm in the head of this person. i'm glad your writing could put me there, make me feel the same emotions as the subject. C: wonderful job. keep up the good work.

Oo! I love this! Very metaphorical. It is often difficult for authors to keep my attention with freeverse, just because the speech tends to be so plain and conversational - but that wasn't the case with this tale at all! The flow of it is wonderful, and the imagery is crafted perfectly. Great work.

hey! i read in your bio that you love green tea- oh my god its like my life! i LOVE it! yay! but anyway, this is a great piece of work.. i really, really, really love reading this poem. brilliant. id really appreicate if you had a look at some of mine... peace and love from holly.

No one deserves that much hurt.

Wow. I don't know what to say to that except that it made me read it again and think. And in my book, that means it was good.

honest, and tragic in its truth.

wonderfully written.