Reviews for butter boy
demonlovesong chapter 3 . 6/2/2008
i love it.

beautiful, lovie.
in a jar pk chapter 1 . 2/1/2007
all three are beautiful...filled with such vivid imagery. as usual lol. i love your work. x
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 11/9/2006
Oh, sad. I love the phrases "blue morning light" and "beer breath lies." They're so classic and interesting. Beautiful poem. Keep writing! :)
myno chapter 1 . 11/1/2006
I like it. I don't know what else to say. Not breath-taking, but a basically good poem.
simpleplan13 chapter 3 . 10/30/2006
sad ending... I love how it combined the first two pieces... powerful and amazing
simpleplan13 chapter 2 . 10/30/2006
him breath her name... breathe

I love that line (typo and all).. the whole test thing is beautifully described
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/30/2006
aw sad ending and beautifully written
having reached closure chapter 1 . 10/12/2006
absolutely gorgeous, i always love those poems where people can combine words in such amazing ways that seem impossible. i admire you, really. your poetry is wonderful.

-naomi

ps: hah, i was listening to the song that you have lyrics to at the end of your profile, that amused me.. hah

pps: thank you so much for that really long review, it made me very happy :)
Aimee Raven chapter 3 . 10/2/2006
Oh...touché..the last stanza. *god*. There are really no words. I don't know, it's just the way you put it. Fantastic. I like the title too btw "Butter boy" its interesting...keep up the brilliantness! Love, Mia
Aimee Raven chapter 2 . 10/2/2006
:-( very tragic...perhaps the star and sand allusion slightly cliché, but very effective nevertheless..."listening to him breathe her name over and over again in his sleep" beautiful. and of course, the last line...Love, Mia
Aimee Raven chapter 1 . 10/2/2006
I can't believe I didn't review this. Oh well. I think it's a very peculiar, unique piece...your usual style and choice of words, but so...ethereal somehow..the lies and the blue morning light. I loved "pleading druken slurs that sound almost like I love you" the most. Great work!
Aquafied chapter 3 . 10/1/2006
well ha ha ha

who's laughing now
Aquafied chapter 2 . 10/1/2006
reminds me of pregnancy tests

and thats about all
Aquafied chapter 1 . 10/1/2006
but in the blue morning lightone by one she watches themrealise it was all beer breath lies-honesty is the best policy
ketmie chapter 3 . 9/27/2006
Wow. This whole thing is really beautiful. Aah... I can't get over it. Amazing.
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