wow i read most of your other stories and this is one of your best ones, very dark, beautifully writen.

That is some seriously messed up shit.

I F* LOVED IT!

I love this fic, its insane and all, but i still love it!

O wow this story was great. Twisted and all. But interesting. If not for you explaining the plot.. I would probably have been extremely lost. Anyways yeah. Great story.

That was just great! I loved the wonderfully flawed characters and the twisted plot. Had to read it all at once - you definitely know how to keep a person interested. I loved how you wrote Cassie's insanity and Connor haunting her. I think I'll go read it again!

Well, this is one fucked up story. Though beautifully written, it was very tragic. I'm glad it's over, and Clara was my favourite character. Certainly very different from the YA romance. It was very interesting to see you write this different genre, and it always captured my interest.

Cool...but I'm a little creeped out right now. You do a lot of incest in here, and I still don't don't really get it. Maybe I don't want to...this is enough to give me nightmares.

wow. the storyline is...unique. the incest made me wary, but somehow, you kept me drawn in.

that was probably one of the most freakishly grotesque moving stories i've read. it gave me the chills.

incest, love, murder, rape, abuse, money, divorce..

it has everything, huh?

great story.

characters are perfect.

storyline was well-crafted.

it seriously gave me the chills . .

that was..

very graphic.

and horrifying.

but nevertheless, i will continue reading and finish this creepy story! ]

i'm not sure if i really like this story..

i mean, i like the way you write it and the concept of it all;

but the incest is kind of freaking me out. though it IS a good change from the norm i must admit.

hmm.. there are something's that are still unclear to me.

is connor dead? or did he just leave them?

was he like another charles to cass?

i need to read on.

ps. this is no flame or constructive criticism. so please dnt be offended by my outspoken nature!

So Cassie is completely insane isn't she? If she sees Connor even without medication and now she's killed Charles and she sees both of them..

Whoa, this is one complicated family. In the first chapter I though Cassie was with Charles even though they're siblings which makes it incest, then in the last few chapters apparently Conor who's Cassie's oldest brother used to rape her. So much incest!

Your best work ever. Beautifully haunting. I loved how it was written and seen through the eyes of a delusional/schizophrenic girl suffering from guilt and sexual abuse. Often there are books that take this creative stance, but very few also bring in the supernatural element which you integrate beautifully. It must have been a difficult story to write especially trying to convey the true thoughts/character of the other characters through such a limited and muddied POV... Kenneth's reaction to Cassie asking for Charles truly gives Kenneth's character more depth and complexity than what Cassie can understand-I mean, it shows that Kenneth's blood money is not given without guilt and he still loves a child he has more or less destroyed.

Have you considered publication? You should, although you might have to tighten the story a bit. However, I am still a little confused over whether the story is supernatural (with Connor's ghost) or just simply psychological (all in Cassie's head). Although sometimes it's more intriguing to keep the reader guessing, I felt it became a little confusing and a little too complex for Cassie to make up entirely.

Lovely story... hope to see the print version some day soon :)

~el

what made you turn in this direction

of your writing?

i'm still wondering if she really is

schizophrenic or if connor's ghost was

really haunting her.

this story isn't beautiful,

its one the most ugly depressing stories

i've ever read.

yet i still couldn't stop reading it.