ugh! I hate it but i can't stop reading it... its so mysterious and so dark... i've been reading a lot of YA Romance fiction stories lately and i'm not used to reading stories like this... Gosh! It's so dramatic... a sad story... a really, really, really, sad story... and i don't like sad stories... but i must admit... you're really good at writing!

that was so heavy._ it just proves your skill as a writer. you can write anything and make it believable. this was truly amazing. it reminded me of the movie "american beauty" but this is much too twisted. a love triangle between siblings and murder and insanity...WOW. it was really creepy which means that it was effective and that it didn't come out as a lame attempt. i just didn't think that i would be able to read a story of this caliber here in fictionpress. this is like something sydney sheldon would write. this could be made into a movie and it would definitely win oscars. WOW.

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That was very dark.

And very perfect.

Wow. This is one of the most original stories I have read of FP. When I started reading this, I couldn't stop. Very good job. I loved the non-cliched ending.

Whoops I meant "Clara" not Carla

The character of Cassie is weak (e.g. too depedendent on Charles, letting Conner have his way) compared to the previous heroeins but she's still intriguing... so suspicious of everyone such as the neighbour and even Carla her own sister at one point.

The ending was optimistic but so utterly delusional on Cassie's part to think she and her brothers (i.e. a jealous murderer and her rapist) would make one happy family.

The story was definitely worth reading and I couldn't stop after chapter 3... I just wish Charles wasn't related to Cassie (understandly, siblings kissing is unnatural for some ppl).

That's some twisted love triangle you got there (an understatement I know). Charles is perfect for Cassie... expect for the part that he's her brother... and he killed her cat and half-brother out of jealousy.

I absolutely LOVED this part of the chapter cuz it really shows the state of Cassie's mind...

"My palms slam the sides of my head. I'm trying to squeeze the voice out, but it's not working, it's not working. NOT working. Maybe I need a knife to carve it out and bleed all the nasty thoughts from my mind. They'll fall to the ground like hungry leeches. Then I'll kill them. After all, that's what you do with leeches, right?"

Basically, Conner drove Cassie insane... desperate enuff to want to cut out the side of her head. Just perfect.

for some reason... that was shockingly... perfect.

This is deffinately something new, nicely written, but it is making me go a little crazy, because i get too attached to the stuff i read and start sympathizing with the characters, but i am guessing that is what you wanted, especially with the last paragrapy of the story.

But from a different P.O.V dont you think that it is to cynical?

Sometimes reading stuff like this makes people think it is ok to do what the characters in this story were doing, for example the whole brother/sister relationship, how connor was raping his sister, after all all the rapists started off by watching porn~

thoughts just dont surface in a humans mind out of no where their always is a source that trigers off there behavior

I've lost count of the number of stories I've read online, and I've never submitted a review, but I absolutely felt that I had to comment on this one. I really like your style of writing: you don't feel the need to spell out every last detail of the plot, yet you still manage to keep it from becoming vague and confusing. I wouldn't really call it dark, though, because I find that those stories can be a bit overdone. Real, I suppose, would be an accurate description. Sobering, perhaps. Thank you for writing this- it was a treat to read.

Wow, shows what money, guilt, and jealousy can do to people. Oh how old is Cass/Charlie/Conner anyways? And I liked the whole 'C' name thing. This story was a very 'dar' kind of story but written very well. Really indepth and such. Poor Cassie, well not really because that's 3 murders. Kinda incestous, but not really? Huh, wow. five stars.

Middi~

Very intense. Reading your work inspires me to write.

After months of hesitation, I've finally read this, and I wonder why I haven't bothered earlier.

Three words (that I used to describe this to my friend): Pure brilliant madness.

By the way, I've read most of your other stories up on FP, just haven't submitted a review (or at least I don't think I have) before. And I think you're really wonderful. ) Will try to be less lazy and review more~

Well...this was certainly a breather from the high school dramas you usually do.

Ok, I admit it. I didn't particularly like the summary. It sounded just a little too angsty and dramatic for me, but then I read somewhere in one of your FAQs that you considered this as one of your best pieces. So I decided to read it(seeing as how I love all your works with the exception of the Son of Walmart...that one was scary

I read Eidolon after being entertained by one of your more popular works from the past. Although the other piece amused me to some extent, I never really classified it as anything but a typical story about High School idealism.

Conceptually, I found it to be lacking and I was a bit puzzled by the large number of reviews and fans it had received.

However, even with this mind-set, I still managed to appreciate that it was fairly well written for a story of its nature, so I decided to follow your latest piece which at the time happened to be Eidolon. It was to my delight that I began to see both a stylistic and conceptual shift that I found more appealing than in your previous work. The writing showed a level of impressive maturation that was previously lacking.

In and of itself, Eidolon was a lovely and captivating story, written with such raw emotion and candor, that in its bulk, it radiated sincerity, but there were still occasional moments where I remembered your previous style and questioned the actual candid nature of the writing style.

I would like to assume, that it is your prose that has matured and not an outside influence that has sparked a similar mimicry in your own, yet I don't know if this assumption would be an act of naivety.

I can just hope that my theories are correct and that you will continue to grow as an author and to maintain your own voice.

Regardless of my speculations (which are primarily conceived from the comparison between this piece and your others), I'd like to thank you for this story which I found beautiful.

I wish you luck in your future writing endeavors.