Reviews for Inflammation
brittle hearts chapter 1 . 6/17/2007
Very powerful piece of work.
AluminumMuse chapter 1 . 3/27/2007
Some grammatical errors, you could use an editer, and it could use some more powerful discription. Try using a more 1920's style, forming description of bold verbs and nouns, instead of so many adverbs and adjectives. Other than that, fabulous. Sometimes I just want to blow up, too.
wildwolffree17 chapter 1 . 10/7/2006
Oh. This is... so very descriptive and heartbreaking. Well done.
in a jar pk chapter 1 . 10/2/2006
this imagery is nothing short of gorgeous. i can't wait to read more of your work. xx
MistressMaryAccost chapter 1 . 9/29/2006
Oh how I feel your narrator's pain. This is short and pretty much ranting, but I like it. One comment: "a soul that once was Laura's" sounds awkward to me, mostly because you just used the name. Also, I'm assuming this is a one-shot but it could be the prelude to an interesting piece, probably character- rather than plot-driven.