|Reviews for Charlotte's Island|
| xxcanyouseemexx chapter 18 . 5/1/2008
i like it!
| Wesley Kelly chapter 14 . 1/15/2007
Well, that sucks for Nathan. I hope that everything works out for Charlotte and the party and she can get her homework done.
| Wesley Kelly chapter 13 . 12/8/2006
One critique I do have for this story is that it moves too slowly. Not much has happened and very few of the plot twists are being developed. Otherwise, it is well written.
| Wesley Kelly chapter 12 . 12/3/2006
This is a very good story, though I doubt a (12-year-old) girl would ever be entrusted with the care of a 5-year-old for more than a day. Are there any relatives or close family friends anywhere? Even if the mother is only sick, it sounds as though she's been sick for a while and it's about time to call child services. However, it is well written, even if the plot is moving very slowly. I see the part with the father being killed moving, but not so much with Charlotte. Update soon.
| disabled account chapter 1 . 10/2/2006
Ms. Becca di Beppo Esq.: Sounds intriguing. I'll be keeping up with this one. Does the novel deal predominantly with her father's death? Oh well, I suppose I'll have to wait until the next chappie ... I'm presuming he was murdered, but I can't be sure. a few grammatical and/or structural mistakes: "fed she and her brother" should be "fed her brother and herself;" there should be an apostrophe between the "t" and "s" in "hearts;" repetition of word "theaters" in the same sentence; repetition of the phrase "three months prior" in the same sentence. Will be looking forward to reading the next chapter! *sh ... I'm supposed to be working on my AdGeom homework ...*Adieu, Kat :)