|Reviews for Only Two|
| SeaVoi chapter 1 . 5/4/2008
These two lines are amazing:
"Until there is only one
I think you should end the poem here, I believe the reader can fill in the rest. But, I do like the line "led this foray" which would be cut out. So maybe I am just typing with out thinking...
You have so much talent that I want to cry.
| Japyra chapter 1 . 10/8/2006
Very metaphoric if met in the right context. You were going for a simplistic diction and repetitive to prove a point but while repeating words are fine try not to repeat meaning... Very thought-provoking.