Reallyyyyyyyy good and interesting book, dont ever stop! Pleaseeeee finish ittt!

Okay, I don't want to be rude, but your writing could definitely use some improving.
I usually don't mind the stream of consciousness type of writing, but the way you write it just makes it seem immature. Like, instead of a teenage boy he sounds like a twelvie squealing over, I don't know, a kpop band.

And all the characters seem to be in love with Chris, even though he doesn't seem to have any redeeming characteristics except for his body. Like Rick seems to come out of nowhere and declare his love for him by sexting him? Kind of? (Does it count as sexting if it's by email?) And Bone (which is a stupid name. Is that his real name? I don't remember.).

Chris himself seems really shallow and two dimensional, and he doesn't really have a personality. All he does is drool over boys, deny that he's drooling over boys, be inconsiderate to people and repeat.

Indeed, none of your characters really seem to have a personality. Like, Rob just seems to be this character made just so we know Lila has a crush on Chris. Rick appears for a second to declare his love (or lust or whatthefuckever) to made Chris seem more desirable.

The football team are stereotypical pricks which pisses me off because what part of playing a sport and being athletic denies you the right the be a decent person?

Your grammar is okay, maybe a few misspelt words here and there and the wrong use of "they're, their and there", but it's passable.

I'm glad Nina isn't dealing with Chris's shit. No one should have to deal with his shit. MOTHER TERESA wouldn't deal with his shit.

Jesus fuck why am I writing this ten years have passed you're probably in your twenties by now
well fuck this
if you get this email
HAH REMEMBER WHEN YOU WROTE THIS SHIT
SHAME
SHAME YOU, YOUR FAMILY AND YOUR CO
its too late for this jfc im out

Really enjoyed your story. If you ever decide to finish it. Let me know. I would love to know who Chris choses.

So I find this sort extremely enjoyable and I love Rick but I have a few things that you may want to look into.

1) leash is spelled with an s not a c. It looked like you were trying to say leech and misspelled that, too.

2) conceded means to give something up. What you want is conceited.

3) as much as I adore Chris, I lost most of my respect for him when you added Wes into the love equation. It's feels like your just trying to add too much drama. Bone going through his traumatic camp experience and 'breaking up' with Chris is enough. If you continue with this story please don't turn it into a soap opera.

-Shama

Was i the only one laughing at "you want me to chose the mashed potatoes" because it was super funny to me actually the whole story was.

Yeah, people are still reading this, so please continue, this is a very good story. Pretty pretty please...

the story was hilarious especially the mash potato part :D

can't wait for more chapters :3

lolXD

im so late but the mash potato line killed me. btw this is an amazing story.

Okay, so um ... it's been like three years since you updated this, and here I was hoping it had been finished *pouts*

Well, this is just to let you know that people are still reading this. AND enjoying it. It's loads of fun~

Oh my gosh, I LOVE this story. It grabbed me from the beginning with the list of tasks, and it kept me captive 'til the end (pseudo-end). Seriously. It's 4am.

It sounds weird, but I love that each of the characters is kind of infuriating in a way (or in Nina's case, in every way). I like that they reacted in ways that made sense (mostly) for their situations, and they had actual human flaws. They got angry, they had pride, they deluded themselves - but none of it was over-the-top. They're all practically bleeding drama, but in a crazy fun way. Thank you for holding the angsty, everybody-hates-Chris (umm, no tv reference intended) stuff down to one chapter and resolving it all quickly. The internets do not need another 35-chapter story about a poor little gorgeous nerd who has no friends, who everyone picks on, who gets raped like it's going out of style, who is only saved by his semi-closeted jock boyfriend who just wants to take care of him like a china doll for the rest of their lives which they've decided at age 15 to spend together. And suddenly this is seeming less like a review for your story. Ahem. Anyway, it's awesome so far, and I can't wait to see how it ends.

So... I just spent the last 3 hours reading your story all the way through, and I must say it's... A MASTERPIECE! You're one of the writers that gives readers hope that there is an original story out there, and i thank you for it.

I really wish you would update...i want to know who he choses and how, and how the last task is completed and if he still gets the car...so much! So please please update:D

Rayne

Please please please tell me that you plan on finishing this story...i will be uber ubset if i dont get to see what happens to the three...its a great story...and i would love to see this published..i would buy like 100 of them! lol...i cant wait to see what happens...please update *puppy dog pout*

Rayne

I hope you update soon. Thanks!

Ah! Just finished 21, and it killed me. The story's fast pace and Chris's ever changing make out choice keeps me captivated! definately one of the best reads one here! I can't wait to see who he chooses(three some anyone?)!