Reviews for your illegal in thirty eight states
hail.the.bloocheese chapter 1 . 7/3/2007
..i feel somehow nostalgic, it's beautifully written in contrast to the dark subject matter. wonderful!
Last.Real Record Store onEarth chapter 1 . 6/14/2007
"i'm sinning six ways to

midnight tomorrow" I liked that one a lot, as well as the Motion City Soundtrack reference in there, one of my fave songs. Great job.
Her Wishing Well chapter 1 . 4/6/2007
Amazing, i adore it!
just a ray of sunshine chapter 1 . 3/16/2007
this set my heart racing and i love the line from the motion city soundtrack song. i lovelovelove them. i also loved the "(I play Russian roulette with a fistful of twenties

& a temper full of heart break)" line. this was pretty incredible.
boys kiss girls chapter 1 . 2/11/2007
I like this. Don't get me wrong, but I like the whole reference to the edgy teenage angst scene. Oh, and I also liked the lyric from Motion City Soundtrack tossed in there. Actually, I think I might go listen to that now. It's one of my favorite songs.

And for some reason this makes me think of a somewhat scary Route 66. Very interesting...

good job.
theoretically beautiful chapter 1 . 1/9/2007
"(I play Russian roulette with a fistful of twenties

& a temper full of heart break)" I don't know why but this lne makes me melt.. its great.
ShadesofBlue69 chapter 1 . 12/23/2006
and I like this too! It's very edgy, and I like how you tied the beggining of the poem to the end. nice job.
Sad Songs Remind Me chapter 1 . 10/30/2006
I'm pretty sure that's an oral sex reference in there and it seems like a really awkward one at that. Not good.
riotmaker chapter 1 . 10/23/2006
this is incredible. gorgeous writing. gorgeous poem. just all-over amazing.

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klare chapter 1 . 10/22/2006
i love it, like i really love, it's gruesome but beautiful. i would fav it but i never fav anything. great work.
Cheeseraptor5 chapter 1 . 10/19/2006
Whoa, that was really well-done. I had to improvise with the flow a few times, but I really liked your style. Excellent work.
dress her up in fairytales chapter 1 . 10/10/2006
this should be made into a song. i can just hear it now - it reminds me a lot of songs that i've heard - but definitely in a good way.
MidnightStar005 chapter 1 . 10/10/2006
This I really, really LOVE!
Theory Of The 4th Dimension chapter 1 . 10/10/2006
This was nice...the imagery just makes you reminisce about nights like that.

"...thinking about his hips(and my teeth on them..." this scene is kinda ridiculous though, but I get what you're trying to say.

But overall, I like this, and i'm not just saying it. Your metaphors are alot of fun to read so kudos!