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Wow. That's deep. I really think that's somebody before their gonna die of blood loss thinks.

Thanks for pointing out that mistake in my poem. It has now been fixed!

Nice. Catchy title, catchy poem. No complaints. Can't wait to read more of your stuff!

Oh, I liked the first five lines a lot, and the last! Was the accident from a soda can, or was the blood gushing out like a soda can?

ah yes cutting. its amazing how blood and a simple sharp edge can make you feel so much better. well, for a few seconds anyway.

great job! i can really relate to this!

Graphically vivid. I like the questioning aspect at the end. Truly descriptive. Well done.

I don't like the topic. Oh where, oh where, is Teddy Bear when you need him? :)

This ones very creative. Hmm... maybe I should've tried that method instead of a pen cap. But then, I wouldn't be here to review your poem :-

i thik the best line in this thing is catch my eye. not sure why, put it does...nice scary and adrline rushy,you know?

["Blood gushes / My blood . . ."] A tad irrelavent, the first few lines in their entirety. The repetition of blood is just a turn-off because it would have been more HAUNTING - I expect that that is the desired affect of this poem - if you had used imagery in the place of that line. Tough, this could just me looking at this too deply; perhaps you WANT it that way.

Alright; I adore your set-up on mood. Even with the irksome use of blood over-and-over - which I still can't decide if its waning on annoying or just "meh, think about it later" -, I STILL really like it. The mood is set up nicely; the atmosphere is dark and tinged with horror and angst and the narration is so devoid but angst-ridden all the same. Its wonderful. Really.

I can't help but really dig the vampire feel, the self-mutilating teen feel, the pure horror feel. It really is nice; it isn't drawen out or wrong-right or anything, its simple and plainly cut and nice while still needing some work. Lovely.

~* Noelle