|Reviews for It's Only a Little Fire|
| temblance chapter 1 . 1/3/2007
This was an interesting concept. The only thing I think that detracted from the story was the lack of commas. In speech, it helps to include them so that the pauses mimic how the lines should be spoken. I felt that here:
"Well, it was at the edge of dark you know and I’d just gotten to that little creek when I saw something in the trees.”
commas should have been added before and after 'you know' to separate that phrase and to add emphasis, just like it would be spoken. Also:
"It’s called a Sunset Kathy, it happens every evening"
There should be a comma after sunset, because the way you have it written now sounds like 'Sunset Kathy' is one thing. This goes for a lot of the times where your characters are addressing each other- it helps to have commas before their names.
Anyway, just a little cc. Hope that didn't sound too much like an attack or anything. I really liked the concept and I thought it was cool how you could convey it completely through dialogue. Good job.
| bluerinse chapter 1 . 11/29/2006
hm interesting. i liked it but i think it could have been better. is the Pond Road legend a real one?
| Shikaido Yuki chapter 1 . 11/15/2006
IT'S... A CLIFFHANGER! Are you going to continue it? If so, please do!
| Scarlet Dragoness chapter 1 . 10/21/2006
I like this, and I hate when people pick and choose what to review! This sounds good! It was part of a contest? Well, anyway, keep it up! I like it!