|Reviews for Lost|
| Thurayya chapter 1 . 10/21/2006
Wow - so short yet powerful. I love that last part especially - my thoughts exactly.
Only CC that I have is that the first paragraph is made mostly up of sentence fragments. Although you may have been using that to keep things short or for artistic effect, by making the language smooth it's much easier to read and people won't have to stop to think about that last sentence.
Otherwise, great job!