Reviews for This Could Be Love For Fire |
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![]() ![]() ![]() So much drama.. this is uber entertaining :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was wondering when you're going to update? |
![]() ![]() ![]() it's getting dramatic xD i love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() GR pleasse update? |
![]() ![]() ![]() interesting! CANT WAIT FOR MORE |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw poor sadie stupid lauren. kicking her out like that. and aw again at the end with Lyndon. but i guess i get why Sadie said 'not yet' it's nice that Cole came out about his...i guess you could say feelings. he seems like a much nicer person now and that stupid akello killing her zebra like that. gr good chapter can't wait for more izzie |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was good. Actually way better I love the characters reactions and finally Sadie seems to have picked up a brain. I really liked it actually and I think it's a good idea to go back and edit after you're finished. Lets just see where the story takes us and then you can go back and change it. It's always fun to see how a rough draft of a story will play out. hehe. Update soon this story is getting good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() she is in a rock and a hard place |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, I've read your whole story but I forgot to add a couple more things...hehe. First of all, Sadie keeps abruptly switching between the guys and she has moved on WAY too fast from Chris. Now I dont know whether you were just rushing to get to the point, or you did it unintentionally, but it kinda, you know, 'punctures' the story...:D I hope my reviews are helpful, and please dont take these as mean reviews. :D UPDATE DARNIT! Gulistanlik |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really rushed. I know you're trying to get to the point, because most times so do I *grins guiltily* but you really need to slow down a little bit. But dont worry, I come across MUCH worse. :D Now, you asked what things they were saying sounded unreal? Well I guess the whole rushing of this fic makes some things sound unreal I suppose. With Lyndon's 'baby' for example. It sounds a bit off. And I'm getting an image of 16-17 year olds making out with each other just for fun and sex. If you want to get romance in here, then I think you need kind of cut back on the 'I just want sex' thing. hehe. But if you dont want romantic anyway, then you will do fine so long as you slow down and not rush. There we go again. Rushing. I guess if you slow down, everything else will slowly come into play and improve. I hope my review is helpful, please dont take this wrong way. I want this fic update ASAP! :D Gulistanlik |
![]() ![]() ![]() No seriously. Sadie here is a ditch with a capital B! |
![]() ![]() ah i dont want her to betray Landon! SO SAD. and even if she does i REALLY REALLY hope they end up together. k bye! update sooN! -Roxy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ok i'm getting mixed signals here... i thought she was going for cole *who is an ass* and now it's lyndon *who i hope keeps her bc he is way better a guy*. plz pick one guy i cant live in this constant turmoil! |
![]() ![]() i don't like sadie. she's such a skank. gr... she needs to pick. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i just have one thing to say - DAMN THAT STUPID COLE! grr i hate him even more now. the tattoos and piercings are sexy...but... Lyndon...stay with Lyndon. don't go with Cole. Evil, evil Cole. Sexy, innocent Lyndon. Choose the good one! PLEASE! anyways, good chapter, made me hate Cole more - but...i guess i shouldn't blame you since you didn't try and make him that way ] izzie |