It was a pretty good story over-all. It wasn't absolutely terrifying, but fairly suspenseful. It would've been nice had it been just a bit longer, just a bit more detailed, but it is good as it is. Keep writing.

I liked it. You created an atmosphere, but I'm not so sure about the last paragraph, I expected it to be scarier. It's good though, keep it up. :)

Man, the Candyman and Bloody Mary always scared me when I was little. I really hope to read more of this.

oh crap thats scary. Very well written. You should write some more one shots, they are amazing

THAT GOT ME SCARED. JESUS, KEEP WRITING!