|Reviews for When All Seems Lost|
| Vanilla Tea chapter 4 . 3/13/2008
The way you write is so good and the way you show how lost she is...
A lot of times in this chapter, especially the first half i think, the words change to present tense and then the rest is past tense.
But other than that its great so farr!
| Vanilla Tea chapter 3 . 3/13/2008
I didn't think this chapter was dull, I think the relationship between Mills and Dee is really sweet
| Vanilla Tea chapter 2 . 3/13/2008
aww I like Mills :) lol he seems sweet.
| Vanilla Tea chapter 1 . 3/13/2008
Oh, wow. The way she didn't understand what was going on at all made it even more sad, everything you write about your dad makes me cry :( i could see some things in here from the poems you wrote, especially how you told them everything was going to be okay and how he squeezed your hand. This is really good.
The only thing that bothered me a little bit was when they're talking, like when Dee was talking to Victoria, their dialogue is in the same paragraph and should be separated, i think. And you'll probably mention it later, but i'm just curious about Dee's age.
Nice job, though
| Twilight Starr chapter 13 . 2/17/2008
Interesting chapter. I like it would be adorable if her and Mills got together. :D Nice work. Have a great day.
| Atropa Belladonna87 chapter 13 . 2/4/2008
i thought i read something like "delete this story"? correct me if i'm wrong but u were gonna delete on of your finest works ever?
well, for your own health i suggest you don't think abt this again and if you do squish the idea out immediately! :
nice chapter and somewhat of a reunion for the characters after the rediculous move from dee's part which is moving out in the first place. please please please, we need to read you just have to deal before our hair grays out! sorry! that was mean but i you gotta keep writing and updating.
thanks for the effort girl and for putting up with my rambings. :$
| Atropa Belladonna87 chapter 12 . 2/4/2008
oh no! i really feel like i hate the author! why would anyone put their own character through all this? :'( i hate the events taking place in thi chapter with a passion, but of course nothing can be said abt your style and the way u've put it. off to read the next chapter.:D
| Atropa Belladonna87 chapter 11 . 2/4/2008
if it were me, i would shoot the person wowants to paint my room yellow! who on earth could stan looking at such a color? nice chapter wafa. it was also nice they gotta live in a dorm, because it sort of gives the feeling of a boarding school. i'm off now to read the next chapter. sorry for the late review. :$
| Taylary Daisuke chapter 13 . 1/31/2008
Well look what the cat finally dragged in. Thank you Sage. Finally you show that you are alive! Plus you came back with an update of Les, um, I mean Dee. (Still love Les).
Anyways… ack, I just remembered how the last chapter ended. Oh well, let’s get to this one in my “review as I read” way.
Mills would have definitely protected you, Dee. Although I really like the Mills theory I had on my chapter nine review. Hehe.
Lol, funny how the first thing Dee remembers is how painful Les’ squeaky voice is.
Al walked in just as the asshole was pulling Dee’s pants down? So those that mean nothing happened?
What? She missed her own sister’s exit? Don’t worry, the video tape of it will probably be shoved into your mind like twenty kazillion times. (That’s how many times my aunt watched her own wedding anyways).
Dang, my memory doesn’t remember a Ty… I’ll have to reread then or maybe this is just a new character addition but…. Nah, I don’t remember a Ty. SEE? This is what happens when you take this long to update. Your reviewers suffer brain damage. lol
I don’t remember a Lily either….
Oh, damn, let me get this straight. Dee left her aunt’s place probably to go back to her own house, right? But her elder sister got married and her elder brother is moving to New York so… that means she’ll be leaving alone with her mom? “Hurray…” (insert as much sarcasm as you want).
Drum roll… MILLS IS BACK!
Hn…. Angsty people who put a strong front but are always on the verge of crying kinda get on my nerves. If you are going to put a strong front, put it and don’t act weak and in need of comfort. Make your skin hard. lol, or at least what a drill sergeant used to say. Personally, I think it’s better if one doesn’t have to put up any kind of fronts. Just be yourself. So yeah, maybe Dee should start forgetting.
Huh? Did I miss something? I ended? Well then go to your stories and change it from (in-progress) to (complete).
Can’t wait for the sequel, and don’t worry about the dorms. I use the dorms in my next high school story, that is, if there is another high school story. I don’t know if this is the first story that you finish but congratulations are in order so… “CONGRATS!”
Yep, that will do for today. Take care
| Zephyr-wings chapter 13 . 1/30/2008
Oh, for the love of lollipops you finally update! You been a bad bad girl, jk. Anyways, I love the chapter and what you did with the story. I was getting into it again and then just as suddenly, it was over. I no way saw that coming. I can't believe that was the last chapter! But it was good.
I never read Just Have to Deal so I don't know what to expect from it but I will definitely check out your new lollipop story!
| Rosemistress chapter 12 . 12/17/2007
o.O! i'm in COMPLETE SHOCK! all "omg, omg, OMG!" oh dear...oh dear, oh dear, OH DEAR! one can only hope Al will ask around, find someone who saw them go that way and burst in and save dee...tho that's unlikely, it'd be ideal...anyway...
regarding the books and her reading...i'll go all out and say she's probably using them as a shield agaisnt her emotions. it DID say "I needed to leave my world and enter another one, become another person, have different problems". that's essential in this theory. as i said before, it's obvious that she's not ok with the death of her father, as is to be expected. she seems to be in the stage of denial, of forgetting. since she can't fix it, she wants to forget it...and is clearly beggining to succeed in smothering all emotions, as les said she'd begun to act "rude"...she's forcing herself away from evryone, perhaps thinking that if she doesn't have someone to care about, then it wont hurt to lose them...quite the mistake, if u ask me...nonetheless, let's continue...
lol; pirate? typical :P oh, btw, thought u should know, u wrote dee where it was suposed to be les: "Dee had decided that her Tinkerbell costume would have to do since she hadn’t found anything else that she liked." i mean, it WAS les who wore the tinkerbell outfit, no?
setting aside alfred's clearly huge ego, i like his personality...it makes me laugh, how me makes moves on dee and she, ever so classy, turns him down almost face-flat on the floor _. loved how he refused to let dee stay home _ then again, considering what's about to happen, perhaps it'd have been best that she stayed...
oh! nice burn! that certainly brought his ego down...but not by much, apparently :P Al is quite the persistent guy, clearly.
setting aside the obvious, i found it interesting for the guy serving the drinks to comment that...he has no idea how right he was, and dee how much of a dummy she's being...she shouldnt have kept drinking. i mean, sure, a drink or 2 is ok, but if she didnt know just how much alcohol she could withstand, she shouldn't have asked for another one...but yeah, thats the typical thing at parties [tho i, for one, also dislike attending them] so it makes sense that's what would happen...same reason why it's VERY UNLIKELY that anyone's gonna "save" dee...something tells me that even if she IS saved, she's still gonna go trhu quite the unpleasant experience, mid-way or otherwise...
and i suppose that's it, for the time being...hope u update soon! _
| Rosemistress chapter 11 . 12/17/2007
first off, terribly sorry it took me this long to review -_- i apologize deeply. next..the review _
hehehe, always glad to know my theory wasn't too far off the truth...kinda contrasts with my previous thoughts of "i never get it right" ;P i'll haveta get to the next chapter real quick to see what u mean. before that, tho...
dunno if it was mentioned before or not, but i really wasn't expecting dorms...this will actually make it all the more interesting _ whether to keep to the usual or not, dorms usually have a "full story" of their own...meaning very interesting and important things will happen.
oh, oh, oh! SAGE! PLZ DON'T LEAVE HER BEHIND! PLZ, PLZ, PLZ LET HER NOT GET CAUGHT! if she is they'll make her get rid of sage! [tho that might be the least of her worries if she IS caught].
lol; oh my, i laughed so much with the hair scene...again, i imagined it all anime-like, les having sparkly eyes and completely entranced with the hair! _
cari! new character! whoot! from what i can gather of her personality at the moment, she and dee will get along EXTREMELY well...les might even grow jelous...and if not jelous, still, something's gonna happen to that friend at some point. u mentioned dee's gonna undergo some changes, and since cari hasn't known her long, she won't complain. les, on the other hand, might have more than one problem concerning dee's change.
miss priss will certainly be a pain in the REAR-END! -_- ...she's probably gonna be the one scolding the girls, as i assume they're gonna cause some trouble [also basing this on cari's comment: "the other girls are going to love you"]
and uh-oh...MORE YELLOW! lol. poor dee, she's gonna have to wake up to that evry morning...cari might, too :P guess they'll share the pain of it all _ tho dee faked her liking it...and les was so psyched she didn't even notice, and if she did, didn't point it out...that's fishy right there!
oh, and a little more on cari's seeming personality: she seems the type to quiet down and listen...the type that understands your troubles even if she doesnt know u. the "wise one" regarding advice...and also, one that knows when u r hiding something, even if she doesn't express it...that i'm 99.9% sure of, specially bcs of how she reacted to dee there in the end: "...while shooting me furtive glances every so often".
last but not least, one last comment regarding dee...yes, i'm aware she loves her father very much...but clearly, we can't say she's entirely over the death...she can't deny that, but she COULD deny the effects it's having on her. she's gonna want to put up a strong front, deny that she's not ok, etc...which would certainly explain, even if only partially, the change she'll be suffering...but i guess that's it, for now anyway _
| Twilight Starr chapter 12 . 11/30/2007
Aww, poor Dee! That can't happen to her. You must save her! It makes for a good plot. Good job describing her emotions at the beginning of the chapter. Nice work. I'm interested in seeing what happens next.
| Twilight Starr chapter 11 . 11/30/2007
Very interesting characters. It looks like their stay at the school will be hilarious. Nice work.
| Twilight Starr chapter 10 . 11/30/2007
Al sounds like he might cause some sort of trouble for her or something. She doesn't seem to like him. Nice work.