|Reviews for Collision|
| half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 3/27/2007
"And then yellow bleeds to red" - I love the imagery in this line. I also like how you made the distinction between people and cars - cars withstanding pain/bodies fragil ... metal shrieking/he is broken, etc ...
The other quote I think worked well was: "He did not feel his final breath - He was dead before." Just the way it was said, the words you used. I don't know. Anyway, that was extremely unhelpful there. Sorry.
| With Rhyme and Reason chapter 1 . 11/5/2006
Good. I didn't love the first part, but after it was repeated a couple of times it started to grow on me. There's a really good message behind this, especially with the words, "...immortal, invincible- / Nothing can happen to him/her." Because we all think like that much too often, when in reality we are "oh so fragile." My favorite part was when you described the traffic lights: "He does not see green turn to yellow- / And then yellow bleeds to red." The blood imagery fits. Good.