LOL

that was funny

please write more!

O_O

You must write more please!

A great cliffhanger!

More please? xD

x

lolz this was so funny and definetly worth the read. MORE PLEASE! and can u send Kyohei to my house? He's awesome! And I have the perfect guy for him...(*I am friends with many gay guys*)

Yummy! I like this! Lots. It's cute, but I guess I'm just a sucker for this stuff anyways.

Just a few spelling errors...erm...you put "first ears" instead of "first years." Lol! And erm...Something about "how can you stay made at that face?" I think "made" might be better as "mad"! Lol!

Yeah, but nice stuff anywho. Hope you continue with this!

Derek x

Completely clichéd, overdramatized, stereotyped and unrealistic. Cookie points go to language, which is awesome. Descriptions, for being picturesque and purrty. Structure, which is very nice, and uh...well I can't think of anything more. Good luck hun.

hehe, this was funny... i like it! it's very witty, and the plot seems interesting. Although, the whole chapter is very long, and my eyes sting from staring at the computer monitor too much...so... try shortening it a bit, k?

overall, good job! _