Reviews for the kid who lost a time machine
Isca chapter 1 . 7/8/2009
The opening line is very intriguing. The speaker suggests that this person restrains themselves just to see if they're still as 'in control' as they think they are-they want to feel 'powerful' again. The story itself has many layers. It combines romance with friendship, time with space, life with pain, etc. The dialogue at the end ties the whole piece together. Keep up the good work. :)
this is britt chapter 1 . 12/9/2006
interesting idea! it was good- there were a few weak areas, but you'll have that with anything, really. I love how you ended it. nice title, too, creative.
Noihseret chapter 1 . 11/5/2006
wow, you really are a talented writer. and you end your poems so beautifuly, in a haunting way. I'm looking forward to more!
bipedalcooney chapter 1 . 11/4/2006
Wonderfully written, I love the feeling in this. The last lines are especially great. Good work, and keep it up.
Shadows in the Fire chapter 1 . 11/3/2006
:) Good job! I got a little lost, but I think I've just got to reread it! Love the ending-beginning is nice too.

And thanks for the review on Butter's Duck. I enjoyed writing it!