|Reviews for Pure|
| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 2/6/2007
I like the strong feeling of hatred here.
Just one thing: "Everything horribleness" doesn't seem to me to go together; they're both nouns. Maybe:
Pure wickedness, hatefullness
Pure wickedness, everything
Horrible, mean, and...
Just an idea though. Sorry if it's my problem because I didn't get something.
| Atheneon chapter 1 . 11/11/2006
And the list goes on...
Who are you describing here? They seem to be a focus of hate for you. A person, an idea maybe? Pure (Evil)
Good, the end isn't very powerful as a wrap-up. It seems like you wished to continue your list.
| Basara chapter 1 . 11/7/2006
| Ashelin chapter 1 . 11/5/2006
Wow, what a cliffhanger. I wonder who this could be. Most likely either God or your father? Well, good poem anyway, and as always, God bless.