oh cool! but what do they see? I'm gon'na read the next chapter right NOW!

Oh my Gosh! the way you introduce the mane people in the story, was very detailed but "Brian's" was the logest, of anyone's.

But it sounds like a great story!

heh I like it. First, I like how fast paced it is, it doesn't mess around, either someone is talking or fighting or doing something. Because you have a lot of characters you don't have a lot of time to delve into each persons back story, but that makes this story good. You simply tell us what each is like and then they just mess around during the story acting and thinking (which was really funny) just like how you described them. I'll be watching for another chapter, keep it up.

Dude it needs a little more spice to it but I can at least give it a good rating