Reviews for Identity |
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![]() ![]() ![]() very interesting! you should totally post more. (Synapse is cute, too...) You really like your futuristic stuff, huh? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is pretty interesting. I think it's a good start. Please continue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Synapse's name makes me think of brain cells floating in uh alcohol... The first scene could be catching since it's a simply...safely catching scene, but it's not that elaborated. Also the line "Far away, Synapse woke." is very safe, almost cliché. How many times haven't you yourself read such a line or seen it on a movie? The description isn't even everywhere, sometimes there's too much and sometimes none at all. The vocabulary is good, almost too good at times; don't squeeze in too much, it destroys the flow. The descriptions are very vivid and picturesque yes. But then I don't get what happens with the gun and stuff...where did that come from...Alright, good luck hun, nice story yes |