i am IN LOVE with this story! you havent updated in SO long, i've cheked every day... plz plz update soon. i love anna's character and jesse's and everybody! oye ok im gone bye

your loyal reader,

ali or justdance :]

I just started reading this series and I love it. I think that it's cool that Lenny and Anna have a dysfunctional relationsip (I can relate), but I hope that they're not torn apart. Also, I know that you said in the first chapter that "neither of my parents has forced me into a situation where I am almost forced to fall in love with an unimaginably hot step-brother," but it seems to me that Anna sort of likes this Andy character. But if that's not true, then I hope that she stops freaking out about/avoiding Jesse.

BTW, you accidentally called James Jared in the seventh chapter.

"That was quite a scene Lenny pulled off earlier today," Jared (you meant James, right?) commented on the way to the car. I nodded chuckling a bit at the memory.

eekk i just got done reading it all :) and i like it lots, especially the beginning. anna is so rad, psycho-ADD rad, or something but its all good. minor errors like typos, missing ends to quotations which can be cured with a quick read over and im not sure about this but base, as in the electric "base", i thought it was spelled like, "bass." that irked me for a little bit, correct me if i'm wrong...but other than that, this story is great!

Okay, I just read through all of this story, and honestly it's INCREDIBLE! O.O Like Georgia Nicholson far more real, and several times more emotional. Anna really seems like a /person/.

And, safe to say, she reminds me (half/most of the time) of myself. Adding this story now.

As for making this a substantial review, the only critique I can give you is that you have this funny tendency to forget to put in the close/open quote punctuation. Other than that, lovely word usage, nice, believable 1st person voice, and other English 11 la-de-das.

*inserts more praise, etc., bribes you to update*

Uh oh! She's in trouble now! I wonder what she's gonna tell him. And poor Lenny! Scarying her like that!

When in trouble or in doubt, run in circles scream and shout!

-Lindzi

Aw I just read all seven chapters last night and I love it! I like how it's not too cliche, like she didn't fall for her enemy Andy or anything. Very cute, keep up the great work!

Bravo!

"Ha ha, You rhymed!"

Love that! Anyway, I'm suprised 'Lenny' didn't have a heart attack. I know I would of. Anyway!

It's fantastic (Like always) So update soon. LOL

Lenny better get some lovin' soon.

OR ELSE.

-Love ya!

-Lindzi

haha. i DID like this chapter. alotalot. i'm glad she finally came forward and told her friend's whatsup. and about MY story.. i haven't updated it because i don't know how to get the paragraphs seperated anymore. i've got parts up to like 12 on another site though. : (

Hm...that seems to familiar somehow...

Just kidding, that was good, and realistic. Keeping in mind this is your emotionaly detached friend, who's parents divorce really didn't bother her that much...it was the shit that came after, but still! It's exactly how I would of felt if I had a heart. Just kidding!

So! Keep up the good work my friend, and crank out number 7. NOW. I'm for real, right now, get your little fingers to the keyboard. Now!

*Crakcs whip* MUHAHAHA

-Lindzi

ok so i feel like a dork for not realizing the submit review box. sorry. ne ways i love the story so keep it up. im waiting for a new chapter!

that was amazing. great descriptions. thanks for updating. :D

Love love love love love love love...!

Of course me amiga, me amo this etapa!

(of course my friend, I love this chapter!)

That black haired guy sounds hott! I wonder what will happen with him? As for Anna...aw, it's so cute!

Write more...like now.

-Lindzi

zomg.

ily.

Hee hee hee. Its funny, because I have seen it before.

Ah, but, Lenny would use her wonderful scooter (Which is not lame). It's very good, so write more soon, or else.

AQUA!

-Lindzi

keep it up. it's raw and awesome.

hahaha.

im speechless right now. well not really but I LOVE IT.

it's so god.

i could die.

jesse seems like he is so hott.

ok ill stop with the long slurring words...

God he's so hott.

ok maybe not stopping.

lol