Please don't tell me that Brandon kidnaps her, James gets to save her, and she falls for him again. She is a pathetic character if she goes back to James after all the crap he has put her through. I don't care if he changed his ways because after all his horrible mistakes (mainly jilting her), he just doesn't deserve her. Oh well, since there is only one chapter left of this story, I think I can see what is going down.

Just let her find someone better than James, even if he is not Brandon.

I wonder who kidnapped her. Nice plot development

heheheh...how like her...thinking of her friend before herself

AH WHO IS THAT! i wanna KNO!

What a place to stop. I think that it is James. Anyway, I hope that she doesn't end up with him.

When he cheated on her, it was more than just one time. He never admitted it either - she caught him. Based on his character he is not someone that can be trusted. She deserves a better guy. I don't know if Brandon is the right one for her, but someone else out there probably is. Just my two cents worth.

AH! POST SOON!

(I love kidnappings :P)

aww I love it!

Awesome! You, unlike about 29902842975 other stories I have glanced over in the past three hours have managed to capture my interest. I can't wait to read more!

So there's no chance of a JamesxxLaura relationship? Hmm, I don't know. I like how you keep the reader in suspense a bit.

I wonder what James said that got Brandon upset.. I can't wait for the next chapter!

HAHA! Nice chapter! It took me awhile to remember who Ben WAS, but then once I did I was like, "okay, all gravy now."

I can't beleive she said yes to James. Out of all the things she could have said, "go to hell" included, she said yes.

Nice ending! I love it!

Interesting chapter. Please don't take this the wrong way but I feel as if Brandon is a BIT to...close for the relationship him and Laura should be having. I mean they've only known each other what? a day at most. But whatever, baring your soul sometimes does make instant friends. I guess because I've never really experienced it, I can't relate.

Other than that, I wonder why Darren and James walked into the coffee shop if they weren't going to get any coffee. But whatever. I'm just glad they didn't catch Laura and Brandon, though if they did, that would have certainly been interesting.

Nice chapter. It was good how you gave readers the background of the story between James and Laura. It seems as if they're never going to get together from this chapter. I wonder if that is the truth, or just how you want readers to think.

Nice chapter. Good inclusion of a new character. I wonder what his purpose will be in the next couple of chapters. Good job adding that Laura thought the mystery person was James. It made the readers think something and become pleasantly surprised when the outcome wasn't as expected.

So like, again with the scene change thing. This time you had it written in more gracefully into the story, but it's still awkward and confusing at first.

Aw. Such a sad chapter. I like how you opened and closed with James and Laura kissing (sort of). It kind of creates a full circle effect that is usually reserved for a whole story, but good in this story. I don't hate it.

Laura's threat to eliminate James's ablility to procreate was amusing. I wonder if she would have done it.

The one bad thing about this chapter for me is the rapid change of scene without anything marking a scene change. You went from, "“Fine. I’ll go,” I said, more out of fear of Sarah than anything else. Even if those hazel eyes had been silently pleading with me all this time."

To...

"I wasn’t happy for three reasons."

Since it was a dinner I would assume it was at night, meaning there was at least a good six hours between the two scenes. It would help readers if there was some sort of a break. Maybe a little nonsense like XoxoX (which I use) or ghighighi. Something nonsensical that tells readers there is a scene change.

The whole, "footsie" thing made me crack up! I loved it!

Poor Laura, all the emotional pain she must be feeling now.

Good chapter!

HAHAHA! Woow. I wondered why she didn't recognize him. That is the PERFECT final line! "He dyed his hair." Not, "GET THE HELL OFF ME" noo, "he died his hair."

great job! I like how when she was trying to "escape" there were so many things that made noise. What an awful coincidence.

I wonder how James caught up with her so easily. Hm...

Great chapter

I LOVE the ending! Such a great turn of events! I can't wait to see her reaction when she wakes up. I wonder WHERE she'll be when she wakes up?

Great first chapter. I like how you effectively captured her feelings and incorporated humor into the piece (“I well I think it is the most hideous dress I’ve ever worn and would rather spend another three hours finding a different dress than wear it to your wedding .”).

I love Laura's reaction to the news of Kyle's best man. Great job!