Reviews for and then you're gone |
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I.Heart.Shi chapter 1 . 7/20/2007 amazing. scary. but too real. i love it |
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 1/7/2007 I like all the song references... they work wonderfully.. awesome piece |
thursdays and rain chapter 1 . 11/17/2006 i can feel the pain. and i do mean literally. this piece is amazing. wOw. |
i'll ask the stars above chapter 1 . 11/15/2006 this hurts, and it twists like a knife. i hate reading what you write because i feel all of this you write about, but i lvoe reading it becasue knowing that i'm not alone in this, that i'm not the only one who can't breathe, it's comforting. you write beautifully, and your talent has grown immensly since I first started reading, and for that, i say job well done. |
this is britt chapter 1 . 11/14/2006 you flattened me, i'm crying. it's beautiful. i'm sorry though you had to go through this, so sorry. i feel like i'm invading your privacy almost reading this. i sort of know how you feel right now, sort of, not completely. you're really one of the most powerful writers at this website, your poetry bleeds and screams with emotion. lovely, just is. |
a lonely september chapter 1 . 11/13/2006 this literally brought tears to my eyes, fuckalisonfuck. . . this is so fucking sad and i just almost cant take it because its too much. its a fuckinpainoverdose. there's just too much sadness here. bitterness, sadness, lonliness. i'm not even sure what else because it just can't be put into words. . . 'but i can't cry you back to me' fuck that line just hit me. . . knowing how much it would mean to you to fucking cry & you fucking can't because you're so numb & i just hate it all. a part of me begins to hate her because of what she's done. especially because she cared, and fuck you know she cared & i think that's what hurts .me. because to care and then leave the person all a-l-o-n-e. how deep do emotions run? ' / is snapped clean in half / cracked / broken beyond repair / i dont know why i want to cry / when i hold the peices in my hands / and / my arms are burning / my eyes are still raw. . . ' & the irony of that really does kill. i dont know what else to say. i could gush forever over how beautifulbroken this poem is but it would mean nothing because... what does anything mean anymore? the ones who you love always leave you in the end. always. & fuck im sorry. |
lackluster chapter 1 . 11/13/2006 this is going to stick with me, i just know it. maybe it was the references to linkin park and nirvana, but i think (no, i KNOW) it was more than that. it's so raw and yet soft. it's so bare and stripped down to just words and emotion, it's truthfully overwhelming. |
contrast and friction chapter 1 . 11/13/2006 I love the (lack of) formatting in this. Honestly, I really do. Although, I don't usually mind the underlining, or the italics .. I honestly think that the lack of it here makes this piece burn with absolute agony.. because the words in this are just so. fucking. powerful on their own, so much so, that just reading them makes me feel overwhelmed and empty (but not in a peaceful, relieved way) at the same time.. "having someone you love so far away is like having them die" this line struck a chord with me.. because, it's just so true. Loving someone, but being unable to watch them, laugh with them, touch them, listen to them.. it's as though they don't exist anymore. & my god, this line is just so powerful that reading it made me feel as though i couldn't breathe. "i want to hear you breathe one last time" "everything tastes like pain because you’re gone" I don't know how you do it. i honestly do not understand how you're able to make the pain so tangible, how you're able to capture the heartbreak and absolute torture that you're living at the moment in words. i honestly don't know how you're able to take something so damn personal and express it in such a way that makes ME feel it, just by reading the words.. it's so horrible to read.. not because it isn't written beautifully (because, my god, it is).. but because the whole time, it's blatantly obvious how much pain you're in. and these words, just written black and white on a screen by someone i've never even met .. they make me cry.. it's heartbreaking, it really is.. |
Chaos Apple chapter 1 . 11/13/2006 I /hate/ this. Oh, you wicked witchbaby, you. How can you remain so...how can you appear so...How do you manage to retain your writing ability through all this pain? I'm lying. I love this. But I can almost hate you for it. I don't like talking through reviews anymore. Respond to my extremely long message when you can. I'll just comment on your work right now. Um, y'know. Just take everything that "She's not breathing" said and put it in my mouth. That'll be good for now. I'm not in the mood to console or reassure. You're amazing-let's leave it at that. Alice (loves you) |
she's not breathing chapter 1 . 11/12/2006 i love that this isn't formatted. i really do. because this piece isn't about art. none of your pieces really are. they're about saying what you need to say in order to hold on to yourself. they're about finding some way to control everything you can't, everything you didn't. & fuck i can understand that. everyone can. this is sheer beauty, dear, just because it makes it so clear. without the boldunderlineitalics - which you know i love anyways since i'd be a hypocrite not to - there's still so much. this is significant. some writers have amazing formatting, amazing raw power, but then once it's stripped to nothing but the words - there's nothing. maybe the continuous flaming has gotten to me but i think it's more they have a point. & i know i've hidden behind the formatting, the clutch phrase; if this looks pretty if it sounds pretty it'll be okay. no one sees. so i'm tryingtrying hard not to now. & i think you are too. don't know if you are consciously, but that's what i see. & there's somethere there. someone there. detached from the format & the dark painanger in your words - there's still something there. this read like bleak apathy despite the terrible emotion. something like being drained. i love it. -kait |
lucidspiritdreamer7 chapter 1 . 11/12/2006 You are so very deep,and wounded. your poetry is awsome though lengthy or not You can write me If You want. sicerely michelle |
Darkest Angels chapter 1 . 11/12/2006 I wish i was there to give you a hug, even though i dont know you. This poem is so amazingly saturated with emotions and grieving. Anyone who reads it would know that your in agony. And even though we couldn't say we understand because we aren't you, this poem just gives us a slice of your emotions and lets us think we know how you feel. Its amazing! I hope whoever is gone will somehow come back to you so they can give you the hugs and hold you because you so badly need it. -Darkest Angels |
dress her up in fairytales chapter 1 . 11/12/2006 amazing, beautiful, raw - ohgosh, i love it. the format is different from what you usually do but i don't care. the words mean everything and they burn (my) scars because it hurts so much to read such words as these. |
BrokenHeartedAngel chapter 1 . 11/12/2006 wow this is good...it is but...kind of creepy...but in a good way. i can tell you ment every word of this. its good... |