|Reviews for she pretends|
| Bavand chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
Oh man! Darlin, you are a master of hard-hitting imagery to every day things. Laundry? Who knew-and yet with the way you wrote it-it makes perfect sense.
| Scribe Of All Trades chapter 1 . 2/7/2008
wow I love images in this one-my fav so far.
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 3/8/2007
You are an amazing poet.
I don't like 'her sheets are her lover.'
I don't know... just sheets isn't the symbolism I would have thought of, especially with the first line of the poem being what it is, but this is still a gorgeous poem. nice.
| incandescent.smiles chapter 1 . 12/23/2006
I like this - the metaphor is a refreshing one. The only thing that bothers me is the last line. It seems like it doesn't have the tone of the rest of the poem, it's like you're trying for finality, but with no punctuation, it doesn't get across all the way. Otherwise, it's good. Very good.
PS - it should be "ex-lover's", not "ex-lovers".
| Noir Fleurir chapter 1 . 11/24/2006
i love the last line in this. nice work :)
| i'll ask the stars above chapter 1 . 11/14/2006
hm. this is really strong, but when i read it, i don't know...it's like a secret someones sing-songing into my ear with a smirk. i love it.
| Rebecca Kelsey chapter 1 . 11/14/2006
Interesting concept, I like it. Btw, in the summary you say "sould", did you mean soul?