Reviews for Once A Slave II: Magewise
meera chapter 29 . 5/15/2007
God, I find it so hot that a seductive guy like Naeven likes being helpless. I guess he likes being dominated, huh? hahaha
Abigail Radle chapter 29 . 5/15/2007
As I always do, I loved this chapter. It makes a nice contrast to the previous, and the magick working is every bit as interesting as the interplay between Sactaeren and Lark. The 'soul-joining' makes me wonder if it could be permanent, if he hadn't undone it. Lark's sense of loss at its severing was certainly interesting.

And of course, I look forward to the next update. You make me love Tuesdays. *hehe* If you updated on Mondays, they'd be the best day of the week.
darknite109 chapter 29 . 5/15/2007
that was so sexy! As usual! Dude, i wish Naeven would stop being a dumbass and just tell the boy he loves him. Oh, and by the way, was that the last chaper in this book? i can't really remember...
Cold Drake Queen chapter 29 . 5/15/2007
Closer and closer we get. I can't decide who will break first. Oh well, more chapters to come.
Amindaya chapter 29 . 5/15/2007
I loved the empathy thing! And at first I was thinking maybe that's what would happen...Lark actually would get bit and then Naeven would be holding the knife to his throat in order to kill him so he doesn't die slowly...but he wouldn't actually kill him, of course, just make an antidote. I can't wait for the update!
a.s. bygones chapter 28 . 5/13/2007
I feel sorry for Naeven, suddenly.

Which is wrong. I shouldn't be feeling sorry for him since he's kind of a bastard, but I do anyway.
Yrvin Thornhart chapter 28 . 5/11/2007
Such hypocrisy. It's either Naeven's jealous or he was really worried. End of story...for me that is. And handling candles while they are alive are indeed a painful experience. I used to play with it as a child, trying to snuff out the flame with my index and thumb. it's effective if you know the trick...
Midnights Scream chapter 28 . 5/11/2007
:) Once again you amaze me though I don't know why this particular part seen so drawn out, but maybe it's because of the prophecy or something? I don't know, but things are getting a little more interesting.
Lonna chapter 1 . 5/11/2007
Hmm. Your first "Once A Slave" was better than this. Somehow, in this one, the characters seem to have lost a lot of their distinctive...I don't know, flavor? Sactaren used to have this seductive mystique to him, and he was sympathetic character despite his "I'm badass" vibes. By now he seems to have degenerated into a whiny, completely insecure...well, brat. And sure, insecurity in a seemingly strong and chilly character lends some depth, but his facade of coolness doesn't even work anymore. Instead he seems to be just as lacking in self control and as inclined to wallowing in self-pity just as much as Lark is.

Speaking of, Lark shares this problem. He was naive most of the time, but he had these occasional flashes of dry wit that kept him fresh. He's changed since then, but not in a good sense: he used to be a lot more likable; less spiteful, whiny, and self-righteous. And the relationship between the two is... it really seemed to be a lot better way before now.

I...feel as though the only reason I'm reading this anymore is for the sake of this story's prequel, which was very enjoyable, and for Schaff and Kivxl (both of whom you still make amusing and likable). I really am sorry if this review gets you down; I just think that you should take a more careful look at how your characters are developing. Then again, I suppose it doesn't much matter what I have to say - doubtless I'm the only one of your fans who is thinking such things right now, anyway.
zoule chapter 28 . 5/10/2007
I'd friend you on myspace only I hardly ever use mine lol. It's mostly facebook for me...
Mortal Harrison chapter 28 . 5/10/2007
Amazing. The way is write is just so. . . out there. There's nothing really to compare it to. your writing style is just that: your own.
ddz008 chapter 28 . 5/10/2007
Interesting chapter! Poor Lucifer, I wonder what happened to him. Naeven really has to learn to be more gentle with Lark... I never understand him XD I hope he was so horrible to him just because he found that letter. Update soon, please! :)
Kaelidra chapter 28 . 5/10/2007
Oh, it was wonderful! I love it!

Could you make the chapters a teensyweensy bit longer? Its so sad to be waiting all week, then be done reading so soon ;_;

But its still beautiful
Koukasen chapter 28 . 5/9/2007
Ooh. Well, I'm not surprised about Naeven's wife. I noticed this a while back, but in the text, Lark calls him Sactaren. Why not Naeven? Or am I a moron for asking? I feel sorry for Lucifer! Poor thing. I hope we learn more about him.

P.S. Yes, I like to 'shaky my head', too. Not making fun. (yes I am T.T) XD
distortedreflection chapter 28 . 5/9/2007
His wife is really a cold hearted bitch. I'm liking her less and less everytime she pops up. however i can't wait till her next appearance she makes things interesting to say the least. I think someone is a little sensitive about his sexual performance. *giggles* I Love the last paragraph Sac is cracking me up with how bitter and angry he sounds.

I can't wait till the next chapter

Toodles DR
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