Reviews for Lethal Trust
Melissa Norvell chapter 17 . 12/2/2007
Funny, I think you're a better author then me. I guess we have a tendancy to think that don't we? lol! Trust me, working on 7 stories at one time can be a real drag. I had to make up a schedule so I could remember to pay equal amounts of attention to them.

I really like your latest chapter, and sorry for taking so long to give you a review. I really like Hiro, he's probably my favorite character.
H i b o u P i e chapter 17 . 11/24/2007

ironically tho, Hiro reminds me of one of my friends. He can be totally composed one moment & then scary mean the next. But, I've learned to callibrate his moods. which is good for-me! D

quite interesting tale you've woven.

& FYI im the biggest procrastinator there is... odds are tht story is gonna be up by monday.

I had to restart it bcuz after 3 hours of frantic writing, i realized it began to sound alot like Lethal Trust... (well to me anyway, bcuz its also bout Yakuza/italian mafia)so... out of curtosy i deleted it bcuz i thought it would be totally hipocritical of me to post it knowing tht. SO YEAH!

*revise* * *
Melissa Norvell chapter 16 . 11/22/2007
It's fine! I'm not trying to force it on anyone, some people just don't realize I update every week. It's good to see you updating more now.

This was a very intense chapter, poor Jin and Crystal! I'll definitely be back for more! Now I must be off to catch up on my own updates Oo; So much to review and type out An author's work never ends.
H i b o u P i e chapter 16 . 11/18/2007
heh heh. -sweatdrop- sorry, i didn't mean to write such a long babbling comment. The comments are usually short but this one i read 15 chapters, so i couldn't just write "well, good job hun." i thought i should write about the whole thing. So yeah. i did.

-waves white flag- nice update babe. Its GREAT! Your chapters are always so intricate. Can't wait to hear from this series again! Hiro's a little bitch.

-miku :glomp:

ps. im very glad i read this bcuz you saved me from the abomination that is... writer's block. thank you thank you thank you. Thanks to you, i should have it up by the end of the day!
H i b o u P i e chapter 15 . 11/17/2007
*glomps author*

heh heh. new reader present and accounted for!

mkay, it took me around 2 hours to read the 15 chapters (yes im crazy fast and did tht in one sitting!) but i think this story deserves a review... if not two from me!

First off, your characters...

they're so well done. You see, i've noticed in many *underline many* stories that the characters lose their personalities over the course of the story, usually morphing their personalities too quickly after being introduced and relationships move way too fast! But with this one, the characters are pretty much the same all throughout, minus a few crucial points that changed their outlook on the relationship. You've appropriately made the transitions feel natural to the reader (me). Like Jin & Kouji: They're still bitter towards each other and just recently started appreciating the other's help (2 chapters ago).

Secondly, your plot...

Its such a refreshing take on the Yakuza/Mafia/Underworld theme. It seems to me your more concerned about the development of the plot rather than the small (insighnificant) details that don't really need to be mentioned. Your characters blended with the plot just seem so realistic to me, and the fact that the begin reflects up until now is really complicated to do when writing a story. The plot still revolves around Hiro & Kouji, and alot less Crystal than i thought originally. Ami's story is kinda playing in the background which is nice.

I really enjoyed this story, and luckily for me i found it by accident and just had to read it.

neway, keep up the excellent work and im expecting an update! D

-miku :glomp:
Melissa Norvell chapter 15 . 11/12/2007
A wonderful new chapter! It was worth the wait~! I hope you'll stop by and read Sacrifice! I've been updating it steadily every week.
Melissa Norvell chapter 14 . 8/28/2007
Wow, it's been a while since I've read this story. Sorry about that I only get to review once a week when I update my works (which I've updated Sacrifice and Synthetic Emotions btw)

I really love this story and the characters. Jin is turning out to be one of my favorites.
Savvy0X chapter 14 . 8/25/2007
Sorry, I had a shit load of stories to catch up on, AGAIN. Anyways, te last chapter was actually one of my favorite ones! Call me a sidistic son of bitch, but I love scenes like that and drama that fucks up the main character. It keeps things interesting. I love it and I highly anticipate the next one!
Savvy0X chapter 12 . 7/13/2007
That was amazing! Sorry I hae been gone far too long. Can you believe I haven't read fanfiction or fiction in two months? I have no idea what you're talking about with this being cliche. To me this isn't cliche at all. I have never read a story of this sort before. I love it and I highly anticipate the next update!
KatriAdriah chapter 12 . 7/3/2007
omg, sry bout the long time no review, school camp and family trips got in the way, but this just keeps geting better and better! see you next review!
Melissa Norvell chapter 12 . 6/27/2007
Wow, I feel bad for poor Kouji.

This was a very good story, and so well-written! I was beginning to think I was one of the few authors who could produce well-written stories.

It's nice to find more writers like you around here. You definitely have me hooked on this story. I'll be sure to come back and give you some good reviews on it, and maybe if you have the time, you'll check out some of my works as well.
XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 12 . 6/27/2007
Its okay, Its my first and middle name. Great Chapter, I loved it very much. Keep up the great work!

Kristie Marie
Niki Tori chapter 10 . 6/7/2007
Awesome chappie. Poor Kouji T_T! This story is so great i luv it! X3
XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 11 . 5/21/2007
Y/W. I love this story, another awsome chapter! Keep it up!

Kristie Marie
Niki Tori chapter 9 . 5/6/2007
Wow! I can't stand Jin now. Maybe cause I like Kouji more...anyways. Cool chappie!

Until NeXt Time

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