Excellent job on the space fight. A nice action sequence with good descriptions. Bravo. Once it started up, it was kinda obvious Jayce was going to end up out there but you still managed to pull it off nicely.

Hm whatever Amaya's ability is, it somehow factors in to her mechanical skills if not completely. I suddenly have the strangest image of her being able to build a Death Star if she wanted.

Main cannon? Dang, that is one powerful cannon.

Keep it up you guys.

Wow, excellent! I'm glad you've updated. I love how you wrote the combat scene. _ It takes a lot to pull of, and you did! I'm still interested in knowing what Amaya's power it, but I know, I know... all in due time. Good job.

Rocking job, guys. I await the next chapter eagerly!

Good job as always, looking forward to the rest.

Interesting. I'm curious to see what Amaya's power is or if that neural spiking activity thing is something entirly else.

Wow! Good story! I can't wait until you put the next chapter up!

Nice... I am liking this... Though I can't help but think back to the Viper Spirit... Ah well... I like this all. Keep it up, guys!

As I said in the fourms, rock on kick ass!

A very impressive start to this tale. Battle mechs, meta humans and a galatic war, everything that is needed for classic litterature.

Your writing is very good. I couldn't see any mistakes at all in it. Plus, your descriptions and word choice were very well done. I espically enjoyed the protrayel and interaction between Jayce and Amaya and I look forward to learning more about them.

The breif history look at the beginning was good, helping to paint a much clearer situation of what's going on. So far, it seems like ts one of those wars where each side might not be right or wrong in their actions. Those kind of situations always makes things more interesting.

Once again, this first chapter is really good. I look forward to reading more of this in the future.

Well done