this blew my mind. i like having my mind blown. you are awesome. the way you started it sort of reminded me of ginsberg. you are talented beyond belief. i used to play the cello a long long time ago- it's a pleasant instrument. your writing is incredible, really. i bow down.

verbose

but

i love it

i love every single detail

it's on my faves now.

I see you have taken to prosepoems. This is good.

I like it and I would want to keep it in a picture book under my table and look at it when I am serene but ah well it is yours.

I know a girl-with-cello and you know a girl-with-cello, maybe more than one, I know we know a mutual girl-with-cello, this does not really sound like her though, anyway you said the other girl-with-cello does not exist.

I have not been here for a long time, I am glad that today the oyster omelette and the milo dinosaur led you to remind me to come back.

sweetie, this is gorgeous. x

Beautiful beautiful piece. So specific and detailed, and I just love that about poetry. Original and fantastic. Keep writing! :)

How Ginsbergian! I love it!

Wow, this was really vivid. The imagery is just PERFECT in this piece. I wasn't going to read this, because frankly my eyes hurt when focused on the computer for a long time (esp with this type of formatting), but I'm glad I did. It's...different. What wonderful things your imagination creates...

Wow. I have no words. I don't think I've ever read something so colourful, so full of life. She doesn't exist? Well she damn well exists now. Give her a name and a social security number, we have everything else...damn, I am mind-blown. Seriously. How could you have written something so brilliant? It's just, there are no words...every added sentence, it's like a world springs higher and higher from the letters and...ah, no words. I swear, I've never read something so amazing on fictionpress. And well, there's rarely been something off ficpress that has left such an impression. You have a real gift.

I often get upset when I like an author on this site, and then start realizing that he/she keeps writing pretty much the same type of stuff over and over again...but you always come up with something new and creative and this is just...wow!

Lol, sorry for this annoying long review :-P. Love, Mia

Two dragonfly wings,

Flutter above stark treetops,

Waiting for winter.

what can i say, when with every who the Girl-With-Cello is fleshed to a new dimension but still wholly believable? i like it a lot.

psst, sometimes i eat dinner at purvis street.

This is very good; my only complaint is that the format makes it a bit hard to read.

This is beautiful. It must have taken awhile to write down. I really love it a lot.

Cheers!