|Reviews for The Return|
| Ellin Louise chapter 1 . 11/20/2006
"I probe the sky violently ‘till I finally grip the floor" i like this line. and like the other reviews mention, the last line throws the reader a little.
| The Melancholy Cocoa Bean chapter 1 . 11/20/2006
wow, the last line really blew me, i really wasnt expecting it.
beautiful wording. i don't know if this come naturally to you - and if it does, i envy you very very much.
'my body floats naked over a dea of black and white tile'
wow. keep it up man.
| Frore chapter 1 . 11/20/2006
"My body floats naked on a sea of black and white tile
Baptism by fire"
I love that! And the last line made me giggle.