Reviews for My Fallen Angel
Singkatsu chapter 1 . 2/27/2008
A very sad poem, mind you very good in terms of detail and double meanings. It is also very sentimental and somewhat foreshadowing in nature, almost signifying a death or a disaster that has yet to come. You did a very good job and I can't wait to read your other poems! Keep up the good work and never stop writing!

P.S. Sorry for the
Cha chapter 1 . 7/6/2007
So dark that it made me shiver...awesome poem! Lvoed it!
Sacria chapter 1 . 11/28/2006
Hi DnAPnk,

nice poem, I like the theme and the deep message.

There are a few thing you have to watch out for

1) verb tenses

2)hurt and injured are very alike.

All around though it is a very good poem.


Sacria :)
puppyrock3 chapter 1 . 11/25/2006
This poem is very deep, and mysterious. I love poems that make you think like this.

~you've been puppyfied
TheAngelofhope chapter 1 . 11/24/2006
I like this. :)
sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 11/24/2006
I feel that this piece has a lot of potential it hasn’t quite reached yet. For starters, it needs a proofreading and some editing. For example, I noticed that you switched verb tenses in the middle of the poem, which is not only grammatically incorrect but also distracting to your readers. Also, there are lines in the poem that are unnecessary, and that is something one should avoid when writing poetry. An example of this is when you call the angel both injured and hurt – a repetitive description. On the whole, this was a nice piece. I just think it needs a little cleaning up. Keep writing!