|Reviews for lack of conditioning|
| felicia13 chapter 1 . 12/10/2006
... conditioning, like a long-distance runner? Must be. It's a nice "wandering gyspy" thing. I do so like gypsies in stories/poetry. Endless inspiration.
| darknessblooms chapter 1 . 12/2/2006
Oh, how I hate those sticky, suffocating days in the summer. It's almost worse at night because it never gets any cooler and only seems to get more oppressive with the darkness.
The line: "wandering gypsy no longer" is beautiful and the characteristics you assign to the air makes it come alive and makes the poem all the more vivid. The last line, however, seems to be slightly incongruent with the rest of the poem. It seems more amusing, while the rest of the poem doesn't carry this same humorous connotation. Otherwise, another wonderful piece.