I like how you incorperated yourself into the story even if as a secondary character.I also liked Deryck's personality and I loved how he new she had feelings for him and how he encouraged her then in the end still cared after she betrayed him. I think you could be a great writer. Now I don't want you to get all annoyed about me having a comment on being a writer I have the same problem. But always remeber that you could do even if you don't want to I realy hope you can post and finish another story

I just spent five straight hours reading this into the early hours of the morning. I started at 1:00 am-ish. With breaks and other mindless wasting of my time, I am now done at 6:28 am. I'm tired, cranky, and hungry.

But it is definitely worth it.

I know this review is really late, but I just have to say that this story is awesome. I'd been procrastinating on actually finishing for a while, and I'm kicking myself for being so damned lazy. Nice work.

i have to say you spin a wicked tale, and it's the best one i've read online...ever...by a long shot. and it's nice to know other people who know sick puppies. thanks.

omfg. wow. i have to say that that is the best action sequence that i have ever read/seen/heard about EVER! i love this story and the characters kick ass! i really appreciate how you actually write out their performances, instead of say 'they totally rocked the set', bam it's over. i know i'm rambling but just thanks for putting in the effort i know it had to have taken to write this story.

Wow. For a band dude, you're one hell of a writer! Haha. ]

Holy. Fucking. Shit dude.

I was reading the last couple of chapters while watching an action movie, and I actually turned the tv off to read your story, it was that intense. Good fucking job.

See, you're even making me cuss, which is kind of hard to do.

Anyways, the plot line is easy to follow, and I completely understand about the stereotypes. It just adds another layer to the story. Yet somehow while creating these stereotypes, you also made your characters relatable, which is HUGELY important. Kudos. It takes skill to do that.

However, while your writing and plotline are completely amazing, your spelling and grammar? Not so much. About three-fifths of the time you say 'of' instead of 'or' and then you just have typos.

Also, another question: is it Charlotte or Raleigh? Either you changed the name of the town mid story or you didn't make it clear enough that people lived in different towns... I'm confusing myself. Point is, go through your story and look for typos. Try a trick my english teacher likes to constantly make us use. Read your story out loud. This gets you to focus on the words and the fluency of the sentences (not that you really have a problem with fluency).

Or you could just copy and paste the whole damn thing into Microsoft Word and spell/grammar check it. Your call. XD

I loved it! It was totally different from other stories I've read! But anyways good job and I can't wait to read more of your work!Toodels for now!

just finished chapter 3, and i must say i hate steven

You put great amount of detail into describing everything in a unique way. (Refering to the description of the snow falling)

The characters in your story definately each have their own voice especially when they are interacting with each other, which makes this story standout.

Steven's character already annoys me, I hope Leigha looses him soon!

I'm surprised this story doesn't have more reviews, but I've noticed that people on this site tend to gravitate towards the more syrupy cliched stuff on this site.

Honestly, I never read anything on here-mostly because I hate most of it. Only, the part of your summary where you said this was "the work of several years of my life" made me want to at least check it out.

Like I said, I'm surprised this hasn't been reviewed more. It's really well written, and while I normally get annoyed very quickly with stories playing with stereotypes, I think you do a good job.

I want to wait until I finish reading to offer any constructive criticism (which, at least for me, I really like more than the standard "OMG love this story!" kind of reviews that seem to be the norm on this site).

Anyway, nice job so far.

Ah-May-Zing.

I loved the conclusion. I'll be sure to read your new story when it comes out.

When everything on this site is about arranged marriages, vampires and demon princes, i thank you for giving me something worth reading.

keep writn. its intoxicatin! XD seriously tho. this is the stuff ryt here. u gots sum good stuff goin.

VANDALS! You rock, man!

Damn. A cliffhanger. I hope Spaz isn't some secret CIA Dude or whatever. Everyone in this book is some undercover hitman. Not that that's a bad thing, of course.

Nathan sucks.

UPDATE SOON! I love this!

Holy shitson. I don't think i've ever read a story on punk music, nevermind a psychopathic record company signer. And it's written amazingly. You've got some serious talent there.

Plus, as a punk fan, I squealed when the Soul's were mentioned. They happened to be my favourite. as well as the Vandals. Which you didn't mention! Or you might have, but it's 3 in the morning here, so I probably skipped like, 20 paragraphs out of lazyness.

What was the point of this again?

...oh, yeah. right. update soon.

(And I hope you kill off that sunofabitch Devon. Richard was that coolest.)