Reviews for WeBcAm WHORE xXXX
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 11/2/2007
That's so sad, but I really like it.

~Twilight Starr~
Bonjour Skitty chapter 1 . 9/1/2007
This sounds.. painfully familiar. I think I've read it before actually, but I checked the review list and there was nothing on there.. *sighs*

I hate men like the one you described. They just don't get it, do they?
blackrosestears chapter 1 . 2/2/2007
I really liked it. I like how you broke down everything and knew how to emphasise the right things. I like this verse:

"Baby, I love you

You are beautiful and amazing

And I’m sorry you think I use you

But I just LOVE your body"

Tis great.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 1/22/2007
the webcam part confused me... it didnt seem clear in the rest of the piece that this was only online.. not in person... i also might format it differently... like only bold what hes saying and italiczing the other important parts... still tis a beautifully heartbreaking poem... love the last line
Annaece's Forsaken Corpse chapter 1 . 12/7/2006
This is a lot better than your last piece, so congrats. The only thing that I have to pick about this piece is ‘WeBcAm WHORE’ part because it just seems out of place & awkward. When you give a poem a title, the title doesn’t have to be a line in the poem. Other than that, nice work :]
a lonely september chapter 1 . 12/5/2006
i think that this poem .is. terrific. not just potential, it's there. it gives you an insight to situations like this and you can feel it really well even if you havent felt quite like this. it's very powerful. it's painful, too. but it's all about wanting to be loved. and that's pretty strong.
randompoetry chapter 1 . 12/4/2006
Love NEVER wanted her is a very powerful line at the end, it sums it up very well. I agree that something is missing though...it seems a little vague to me and its a very touchy subject too. I think if you put in a little more detail or something. I cant quite put my finger on what it needs. More of what he thinks of her/she thinks of him.
Alena D'Etoiles chapter 1 . 12/4/2006
Hm...very interesting. I liked the idea, and it really captures the emotion of this kind of situation. Nice work.