oh my God, YES! If you could only turn in one poem, this would be it.

I liked the...what's that called...alliteration of "poercelain poison"..."rotting velvet worn with thin lies"...makes me wonder what a "thin lie" is...and salty rhythms...I really like series poems!

OH. my. GOD. this is so beautiful. each of your words are so rich, colorful, swirly, filled with memories and wishes. desires. i LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem. i'm sorry i sound so stupid, but i don't know what else to say.

this is beautiful.

Nice and touching :-)