Reviews for Running
tuieri chapter 1 . 12/9/2006
you've captured a little of the rythmn of running here, good work :)
The Moribund Marionette chapter 1 . 12/9/2006
Nice. I was struck by the alternate form of the noun 'feet' ('feat') at the end, as a form of symbolism. :)
WordsFlowOutInStrokes chapter 1 . 12/9/2006
The format is very strange...it doesn't flow. The first verse is ABCA and then the next is ABB and the last one is ABBC. I love the imagery, but it just doesn't sound right.

Also, you put the wrong kind of "feet" in the last line. :P

5/10

-Grayce