Reviews for tis the season
lessons you learn chapter 1 . 1/4/2007
I don't know if I'm reviewing twice or not, but every time I try to, it says I need to wait 30 seconds. So sorry if I'm reviewing more than once.

But yeah...replacing people with cigarteetes. I hope he never does that.
acccountkiller chapter 1 . 12/12/2006
Hmm...honestly, I find it too plain (in comparison with your usual work), I think it *lacks* power really. But it's still pretty :-).
lackluster chapter 1 . 12/11/2006
it's so casual and yet powerful and immense. like a whispered 'i hate you' when you want to scream it instead. love it.
Asagao chapter 1 . 12/11/2006
well done!

short poems, IMO, are always the hardest to get right. you've gotta fit in good vocabulary, good syntax/structure, style, voice, everything like that, AND make it feel like people didn't just waste a few seconds of their life by reading it.

And you pulled it off very well. _

Much love!

-Asagao-
i'll ask the stars above chapter 1 . 12/10/2006
fnahjibn fm,asbniorh aw.

gr.

i never say anything useful to you.

gr.

anyway.

you create the most exquisite pictures (my vocabulary's coming back, i perscribe more drugs) and they just scream agony.
Prevaricate chapter 1 . 12/10/2006
hmm. sad that she was replaced so easily.

i'd take out the punctuation after "but"- it interrupts the flow. so instead of "but./i wasn't" just "but/i wasn't"

but maybe that's just me.

fantastically written anyway. gorgeous imagery.
Lucid Nonsense chapter 1 . 12/10/2006
Powerful and sad.