|Reviews for heartstrings|
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 7/20/2009
you have a brilliant writing style that will never cease to amaze me.
it's awe-inspiring, what you can do with your words.
once again, and excellent piece.
| chaos called creation chapter 1 . 1/13/2007
it starts off almost as a light analogy, great contrast to a great ending.
| CHIIJOY chapter 1 . 1/3/2007
I really liked your use of metaphors and writing style. Great job. :D
| lackluster chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
"I’m going to lose you to the breeze of the dandelion fluff/in the backyard."
| acrobia chapter 1 . 12/16/2006
Like a lover, this poem is fantastic. I love the way you repeat the first line, "your heartstrings are snapping like vines" and all the references to nature - they are clever and beautiful. Lovely imagery and word choice. My favourite line is
"you’re a crazy flower in mom’s garden
purple hairy leaves, dead bees
and I’m scared silently"
Although it makes me wonder, did you mean "I'm scared silent"? I feel that if you use silent instead of silently it will be more powerful, but the way you have it is beautiful too.
Keep up the good work,