|Reviews for Captain Skyler|
| Avanie chapter 27 . 2/15
I'd imagine you don't even check these anymore but I know I love getting reviews and you don't appear to have gotten enough love. Fav character: Tyler and oddly Tiffany because they were both held as slaves and yet did some major development and became nice productive members of society. Also Tyler is just adorable and I have so much to relate to about hating school. Favorite joke: I loved the exchange between Chase and his father. Very punny. Favorite scene: when everything goes to hell on Bartin at the Dukes party closely followed by seeing betas in action to rescue Tyler. Least Favorite: only in a relative sense, but I don't like how the last few chapters didn't seem like real additions and where only sort of broad stroke extended epilogue-y. Singing praises: I haven't been on this site in years and years but in my first random search I found this story... And quickly realized I'd already read it those years and years ago. You hooked me TWICE. Completely unknowingly. This story is going into the Permanent Collection. Constructive screeching: slightly more showing than telling of the dense, dense exposition necessary to show this complex world (maybe even a prologue or two or three) and what I said about the last few chapters. Thanks so much for writing!
| Treo-LeGigeo chapter 27 . 12/27/2014
Whee, I liked it a lot! Very nice characters, a rich and interesting world, sweet romance, and a real solid plot. I really enjoyed this story, and I have to say that I thought the summary was cool and kind of quirky even though it really didn't give that much to compel me to read (but I did anyway since I've loved your other stories). Only one thing that felt a little left out with the ending, you wrapped up the whole slavery plot but just I had been expecting the main story arc to address Eph's secret? The white coat revelation came and went but then it was just sort of left...
Still had a great time reading, anyway. A bit different in genre and style to some of your other writing but definitely in a good way, drew me into the SciFi genre when I'd come for the fantasy!
| Swordlily chapter 27 . 6/28/2014
I'm absolutly in love with this story! My english is awful what is usually stopping me from reviewing. I hope you don't mind. My favourite character is Eph, because he of the whole switching-issue. I liked the scene where Eph and Chase talked about Eph being a Whitecoat, because it was so sappy and beautiful. My biggest point of confusion was in the beginning that everyone was able to communicate with everyone and that there where no aliens (or I didn't notice them) but I don't mind that very much. I didn't like the scene where Eph decided that he had to wait for Chase in order to rescue Ace. I thought that he should be able to do more for him or should have done more because when this was a single mission as it was originally planed he would have to have done it alone anyway. I hope you will write more stories like this and am looking forward to it. I am not able to tell you something constructive because my english is crap and I won't notice wrong words and so on.
| Pantu chapter 27 . 3/14/2014
So, I enjoyed this story. I found it going through someone else's favourites. It wasn't the most gripping storyline just because of your structure, but I liked your characters and I thought that the world building you had done was just great. There are a few unanswered questions mostly about why eph ended up being made a black coat and what the blue eyed Elrad boy was all about, certainly there is enough for a second part, though I understand why you might not want to write one. Overall this was an enjoyable read, and I hope that you are still enjoying your writing whatever you are up to now.
| Addiena Saffir chapter 4 . 12/8/2013
I'm dying to know the differences between black and white here oh my god the possibilities.
| Prince of the Rising Sun chapter 26 . 9/18/2013
Oh god!I hate how and chop bits of my reviews!Sorry if some parts of my review don't make sense or sentences are incomplete...
| Prince of the Rising Sun chapter 27 . 9/18/2013
I know this story's review time has kinda I just read it now so me reviewing it now is justified!
About you questions...Well the first obe I must say Aaron and Erik,(if there's any dubious 'relationship' involved!What can I say...I'm a fangirl to my very core and bones and support any two individuals if they have two dicks to offer and pass the 'You Have To Be This Hot' line!) and Skyler!( he had his
moments!)and I would've added Eph but he's too much of a cock tease and too annoying...Oh!And Gringo!I mean how much of an awesome ex is he!I asked a bunch of my friends if they'll do anything like all said I had ti pay the price...*mutters angrily*
2)I...well you can't expect me to remember everything right?I guess the part where Sky licked Ace's Result paper!Oh and the time they were talking about that one time Sky didn't do the laundry so Malard was walking around naked!Oh!And joke about the Shoe and the crew being toes!
3)I really REALLY liked the scene where Eph surprised Myth and Chase and started kissing him in the middle of the alley and Myth's conversation with Tyler!I was like 'awwwww' yeah I'm sappy like that.
4)I...think would've liked to read more about White Coats maybe?Or Sky finding out Eph's real secret?I dunno...
5)I would say that time Eph woke up besides Chase that first time after their supposedly-and I'm quoting with my fingers- "One Night Stand".Why you ask?Because it was early on the store and it got my hopes up.I mean the way Eph was acting like a predator jumping on his pray...and then woosh!Nothing!He has just got up and left!The mofo!(seriously I kept saying Chase shoud dump the fucker's ass like a cold,meshed,potato!He kept cock blocking him!) And I kept on reading,' this should finally be the time',but nothing!Not until,what?,chapter 25!I mean seriously!And even then,it was so vague it barely got a K rating in my book!27 chapter of charged sexual tension and just one tiny,tinsy,vague sex scene?hmpf...*stomping foot angrily then going to sulk in a corner*
6)I would have,but my creative bone said it's going on vacation to Paris or Greece or it's not getting paid enough for the shit I put it through...I said I over pay it compared to most of the other creative bones but it went on strike and now it's giving me the silent yeah...I can't come up with a poem for the life of me...
7)Well,I did it on 5!Now...do I need to sign somewhere?
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| Disney Is Hardcore chapter 27 . 6/11/2013
I liked it :) I'd like to know what the Elrad project is and such, because there are a lot of worldly loose ends that you didn't tie up? Such as how the Whites and Blacks came back together and discovered they were brothers, the Elrad Project, things like that. But obviously they are not really this story, just this world.
Also, I did notice that Chase's anger seemed to completely disAppear by about the fourth chapter? and considering how angry he was before...it doesn't make much sense. I mean, he did start the meditation but, again, I think there should have been more of a transition.
That said, I liked how chase and eph both had the same sense of humor. My favourite scene would probably be one of the ones where Eph is mostly asleep, because he's really cute like that.
| Disney Is Hardcore chapter 26 . 6/11/2013
What a bitch. I don't like her. But I suppose that's not really the point, is it?
| Disney Is Hardcore chapter 23 . 6/11/2013
Now that I think of it, Ace seemed a bit too comfortable in being taken by the leader of the slave trade, considering how he was when they first met him and he was scared of even the thought... perhaps he's gotten over it but it might be better to display a progression? It probably doesn't matter that much because I only just thought about it, but *shrug*
| Disney Is Hardcore chapter 18 . 6/11/2013
penny dropped. hahahaha. I like that.
| Disney Is Hardcore chapter 4 . 6/10/2013
I find the "old-earth" things interesting, like how you casually slipped in that tomato seeds are hard to find and very expensive, and eggs are uncommon. I think it helps to build the world with those casual reminders. Additionally, wondering what the difference is between White and Black, because insofar as I've been able to determine from your description, they seem to do the same job, no? but I assume they are bitter rivals or something.
| taryn chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
I thouroughly enjoyed this, read it all in one go! :)
| Lila chapter 27 . 1/7/2013
I loved this story! Will there be a sequel?
| q chapter 14 . 10/20/2012
I admit, I lost patience at chapter 14 and won't be moving forward with this, but it's not because it's a bad story nor is it because you're a bad writer (because you're fine). The problem is you tell more than you show, you go into too much detail about who's feeling what and why and it becomes so repitive and unnecessary it kills the flow and the thrill of the "now". You also focus too much on fluffy feelings and conversations that I can't take the characters seriously. I have no doubt that with editing this can be a fantastic story because it has all the right elements, it just needs a shift in the narrative style and a lot less googley eyes between the main characters. Thanks for sharing, at any rate, and keep writing. I look forward to reading more of your work a few years down the line.