|Reviews for Captain Skyler|
| Colocho chapter 27 . 7/22/2010
LOVE IT :D
ok now with bussines:
1) favorite character: Im gonna say Tyler (only im imagining a little older *Q*)
2)Favorite joke: wel I dunno, Im not great with english so I probably didnt understad or noticed all of them. I loved that Chases toy was called Horny XD
3)Favorite scene: I love the scene when Chase tells Eph he doesnt mind that Ephs a white coat, it was so sweet and full of fluffines :D
4)Biggest problem: well its not exactly a problem just that I find it rather not believale (is that a word? D: ) that Eph has all those abilities that are just what he needs in the moment. I mean fist the MUG discount, then he can control people, then his MUG also has hacking programs, he can apen doors and copy other MUGS and in the end he had a boyfriend who taught him to do blocks and also has eternal discounts on the most expensieve store. I just think its a little too convinient,
5)lest favorite scene: I dont think I have a least favorite scene or chapter, I really liked them all, the stry was really captivating.
6)You are awesome this strory was great an I loved all the backgroud and the history of the universe they lived in.
| andnobodysmokes chapter 1 . 4/23/2010
I don't usually review completed stories until the last chapter, but I just have to throw out some kudos. This chapter title was fabulous. I didn't notice it until the end, and it was like it read my mind. Awesome comedic timing, seriously.
(Oh, and the story itself is really good so far. Way to pull off the sci-fi space adventure without getting hokey)
| YourEvilOverlord chapter 16 . 4/6/2010
This is really good, you have such a good way of telling the stroy without overtelling it.
| Emerald Dragon77 chapter 1 . 1/31/2010
Actually, this is a review for the last chapter, but whatever, I don't think you can post two for the same chapter. Anyway, I was just reading some other reviews and realized that we don't ever find out Eph's big secret! Unless I somehow missed it? Is it just that you don't know what it is? Were you planning on a sequel?
| Emerald Dragon77 chapter 27 . 1/31/2010
Okay, I'm kind of tired, but I have to review because this must have taken you so many hours of work, and I feel I owe you this much. I was very impressed with the entire world that you created in this story. Was there a story or author that particularly influenced you? The world you have created is incredibly fleshed-out with its own unique history. You have a gift for fantasy (I've read some of your other ones too). Anyway, some things that I liked: 1. I didn't notice the black and white thing that Eph mentioned at the beginning until Chase started figuring things out- I like being surprised. 2. The puns and teasing between Chase and Eph, although I can't remember my favorite.
Suggestions/Criticisms: 1. Sometimes you write Case instead of Chase. 2. At the beginning the relationship between Chase and Eph seemed a bit strange/rushed/I don't know how to describe it. The feeling went away as the story progressed, but I think it had to do with confusion about how deep the feelings were. I don't know. Probably just forget it since I can't really articulate whatever it was. 3. I'd like to maybe see a scene (perhaps a separate one-shot) with Eph meeting Chase's family or vise versa.
I could probably say more, but I should probably finish my homework.
| shuurai-chan chapter 27 . 1/23/2010
wow. it was great. is there a sequel? cause id really like to read it if there is.
| Jordan chapter 24 . 7/13/2009
Hey just wanted to tell you I love your story. Although I haven't finished it yet. Mostly the real reason for the review is to tell you I would give just about anything to be a "supplemental woman". How cool would that be? Since I'm writing a reveiw I guess I should tell you that I really like how you explain everything between the black-coats and the white-coats. You give enough information that I understand what's happening but not too much that it takes the mystery out of it. It kind of reminds me of Dune. It also leaves lots of room for sequels or spin offs. Hint hint nudge nudge
(I haven't looked on your profile yet so don't hit me if there already is one). It's okay if there isn't I'll just make up my own stories (in my head I don't write) Sorry this review is so long and rambling. To end on a good note your story is awesome and so are your others (that I've read)
| frogs of war chapter 25 . 5/15/2009
25: Since you asked, I think the love scene could have used a few more adjectives. This is the hottest sex ever, two minds becoming one, but "He came to the feeling of the hand on the outside and the sparks on the inside, and the clenching of the body around him" is a physical description of a mind altering experience.
I go more for a description of what it felts like emotionally: pressure building, added sensation, heat rising, the feel of Eph calling his name (hearing and speaking), being both surrounded and surrounding, more than anything he's ever felt, the world shrinking, volcanic heat, pressure great enough that stars ignite, having every stroke and thrust be perfect because he is both and each and all, want and need and friction and sounds and smells and epic pleasure that feels eternal and bigger than the universe. And slowly, slowly coming down from the greatest high of his life.
But that's just me.
27:"intended too" to
What about Eph's block? Is he going to have to wear it forever? That's what is tying his mind into knots, isn't it? And the white- and black-coats? Will they continue to be 'enemies' since all the important people now know they aren't?
But I really enjoyed reading this as well as your other stories. As you can probably tell by now, I review everything I read. That way I can quickly spot whether I've actually read something or just planned on reading it. Now that I've finished your work I'm off to devour someone else's.
Keep up the good work.
| frogs of war chapter 1 . 5/14/2009
1:"defiantly in one of his moods" definitely
I'm not sure I like Chase, but he sure is interesting.
3:"up whit a whole" with
4:"“That was stupid, Chase.”" what exactly did Chase do? Eph was the one who grabbed Tyler's arm and asked him questions he didn't want to answer.
"He ran off when he was twelve... he’d barely been twelve when his brother ran away" Twins?
6:"Almond Station" wasn't it Walnut?
17:Was the info dump really necessary? I barely skimmed it, so I hope it wasn't.
18:"looked like looked like"
21: I didn't realize how much I missed your comments at the end of each chapter until I got one.
22: It's way too late to finish this tonight, but this way I have something to read in the morning.
| Mewenn chapter 27 . 4/29/2009
I had actually started reading that when it was still ongoing (don't think I had rewieved then though) and I am quiet glad that I was able to find it again even after so long. By the way I like your summary. Now to serious business, the story was great, the main characters great, but all your main characters tend to have the same kind of mishievious humour which I supposed is yours so no grat wonder there. I liked Tiffany's character because she was really different but at the same time something with her was rather off (what I couldn't telle though). I liked your plot and the betas and I thank you for that great moment of reading.
| Faraway Thoughts chapter 3 . 4/17/2009
Well, I've been registered here in fictionpress for years but never truly read much here; mostly I play in fanfictiondotnet. Now I see what I've been missing. You're quite talented. I love this so far.
I'm sorry for this sorry review-I'll write a better one next time around. It's 2 in the morn here. I'll just say I'm in love with your characters.
My only complaint is that you describe them after I've already created a picture of them, lol.
My eyes are closing on their own,(yawn) gotta go. I'll read more tomorrow but I thought since I'm faving this I should at least give a few words of apreciation.
| Soraya Zeeva chapter 1 . 3/24/2009
You have officially sparked my interest.
| Rhod chapter 27 . 2/3/2009
i'm too laze so i'm just gonna drop some random comments on ya; Eph is fine cuz he's calm and sweet, and what will the "authorities" have to say about black&white coats having a relationship? then it's not like they gonna let Eph live with a bigass BLOCK in his head forever and maybe then he must return to the white side and yada yada, so one of the plot's biggest red strings feels unresolved! and the last chapter feels a bit rushed merely cuz of the cliffhanger ending, still u got some nasty talet there and now i'm gonna read some more of yours, todoloo
| deliriouseight chapter 6 . 12/24/2008
Ew guinea pig as minilivestock!
| Ayreweth chapter 27 . 8/10/2008
I don't really have a very long review to right, because i loved it all!
i really hope there is a sequel out there somewhere, because if there is im GOING to read it.
i think i have a few favourite characters, chase is awesome! and so is Ace, i want one of my own, he's just so full of 'tude!
the only thing i would say is it seemed to me that the last chapter was a bit rushed, i can't really fault the rest, but i was wondering if you were a bit relieved to be nearing the end, cos i think it could have been a bit less skimmed over. although thats a fault i quite happily recognise in myself and so im now going to take some of my own medicine.
anyway really really really liked it, and am now going to read some more of you fics.
p.s. i may have been contemplating not leaving review, but it was too good not to