I don't know. It's a good writing style to keep you reading even if you aren't interested in that type of story. It gives a good concept of want and greed and what it leads to. I like the morality it gives but the reasons could use a little tweaking (He was BORED? XP because he was PERFECT-ish? Sounds odd, maybe he's just got a big head? XD Sorry, but not everyone I know is that..."perfect") But overall it's pretty good and I don't think I found any mistakes...

cool! very creative.