|Reviews for kid computer|
| miscellanea chapter 1 . 6/17/2008
I'm not really one for one word reviews, but that was (in one word lol) fantastic.
Ok my review is more than one word now...
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 8/12/2007
i love the thoughts behind this.
great job. :) -ty.
| Femme de Dieu chapter 1 . 2/21/2007
Ah, The Machine! Who is not drawn to such stony stoacism? The descriptions were exquisite. Great job!
(and kudos to you for taking constructive criticism, but only where you deemed it personally applicable)
| the naked civil servant chapter 1 . 2/6/2007
i am wildly in love with the first two stanzas. which make up the bulk of the poem. so do be flattered. i do not fall in love easily.
anyway, it's all gorgeous. such a feeling of HURTLING, you know? such crazy imagery, i can but envy the ease of style.
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 12/16/2006
Radiohead reference? Or coincidence? Either way I like.
Although I would recommend you put a period after L2 in stanza one and perhaps an and at the beginning of L3 in stanza 2 just to help the flow.
Also "milky, rice-paper" is a bit superfluous. Perhaps get rid of one of the descriptions. If you capitalise "I" then perhaps also capitalise the beginning of sentences.
Apart from those little technical details, you've done a very good job with this piece.
| Sir Scott chapter 1 . 12/15/2006
In one word that poem was deep. Good job.