Reviews for Out of Luck
rayray chapter 10 . 10/19/2008
this was... odd. the tone was very different. i think because it was written by an actual gay man (im assuming). the ending was so anti-fluff, even anti-angst. just...odd. but it was well written, so good job.
dayana11412 chapter 8 . 9/29/2008
Hey I liked this story up until the part with the threesome ,mostly beccause I don't like threesomes but also because the descriptions were to over the top and gratuitous.
Kiki chapter 10 . 9/22/2008
Aw, heck I'm crying and swearing in my head and you may have just destroyed all happy from gay feelings in me.


In a good way.

Just...jeez, man, you know how to write a story. (And deserve another review, hence this shit. :) )
Azrael Adamine Gaunt chapter 10 . 9/1/2008
Beautifully done! Brilliant, it was perfect! I fell in love with the characters and the plot. You are a gifted writer.
ask chapter 10 . 8/23/2008
First off, if I'm review 200 that'd be pretty sweet.

Second, this story is really, really heartbreaking. Honestly, with all the sex and stuff I didn't know if you'd be able to pull it off but DAMN. You did a nice job. And the end- god. My heart broke. Seriously. Because everything just went back to the way it was before and Alec is still so obviously heartbroken because it's just too easy for him to go back and.


I enjoyed it, as sad as it was. Great job. Seriously. I don't know what else to say.
Ladyface chapter 10 . 8/12/2008
I have to get the gnawing question out of the way there a sequel? If not does Alec ever end up happy with Terry because to quite honest, I'm in the rather small minority and I can't stand Dennis! I need to know if they end up together, its like a compulsive

I loved this story, especially because it didn't have an 'and they all lived happily ever after' ending. It was original.

I loved the fact that Alec came full circle. It was like he took on board everything he learnt and was like 'sod it, I have nothing else left to lose.'

Again, I loved this story, and wish there was more of it.

WhetherGirl chapter 5 . 8/10/2008
alec and mallory malloc


1xmocha chapter 6 . 8/7/2008
Someone chapter 6 . 7/20/2008
Wow,I mean shit you really know how to write them. In fact I thought about printing this out and shoving it into one of my friends hands and saying "damn it this is a story that you should have read by now" not that he reads a lot of this although I was on one of my random once a month for the last couple and months of just going a little crazy with the search engine on this site anyway trust me when I say this that I've read smut and yours was laid on heavy in a good tasteful going with the plot of the story way huh yeah also in a way that's like "yeah porn sites don't have shit on me"(no, I actually don't visit those although it's a been there done that over 3-4 years ago type of thing a

definitelynot-proud-of-it-not-exactly-lawful-no visuals thing, and if this story by way of summary had interested me when this was first put up because I've noticed this story off and on and even the last update of this thing even if it had been a year later-yes I'm 18 now-but yeah too young then if we're going by 18 you know, but um damn I was "corrupted" a long while ago but more mostly by less descriptive lemons and a couple of limes-you know, and well it was more by fanfiction then original fiction and we're talking damn and I look so fucking innocent meaning that I don't have the experience of being laid-meaning that I could give your main character a run for his money in the innocent department but also good call on doing the thing that in reality would've occured with Dennis telling Terry what he and Alec had done seriously realistic. Now that I've revealed way too much although I almost revealed a little more-and I haven't even been drinking then again I've been on this site for a few hours and it's past early morning so my sleeping pattern has gone to shit even by my're a good writer seriously so I'll just finish this later also your pen name is very intriguing I really like it.
V.A. Hale chapter 10 . 6/1/2008
You must be some sort of Plot Master.

The first chapter made me smile, the last chapter made me feel unsure whether a sequel was needed or not, I came to the conclusion that it was not needed and that your story was perfect the way it ended.

This held just the right amount of creepiness and humor to be my kind of story. (Creepiness at the end, humor at the beginning.)

Feel The Waltz chapter 1 . 5/31/2008
I've read this like 3 times now & i thought maybe i should actually leave a review. But in all honestly, i suck at reviews. So to put it simply; you are teh beez kneez.

Olivia chapter 10 . 5/27/2008
I just read all of this story and absolutely loved it. It made me both happy and frustrated (not a bad thing), especially because of how Alec seems to learn nothing from his whole experience.

Actually, I quite like that he accepts that his playing with other men means that he's a complete jerk... and then continues to do so.

The end is so very bitter sweet that it's more believable. Terry doesn't just drop his boyfriend for Alec. There isn't a true, fairytale, 'happy ever after' and although I feel quite sorry for Alec; it's nice that he doesn't get everything that he wants on a whim.

Sorry, I'm probably rambling in a particularly boring manner but I wanted to leave some sort of feedback, despite my inability to put my ideas into structured writing. Now I shall go and read some of your other stories.

Thanks for writing such an entertaining piece.
an-array-of-starlight chapter 4 . 5/15/2008
_ I like this so far. I'm sleepy now, so I'll read more later. :)
frolic-horror chapter 10 . 4/19/2008
Amazing story. I think it has a bit of everything in it. It's probably the best I have ever read.
pangur chapter 10 . 3/30/2008
there are no words to express how much i laughed, how much this whole thing was so. fucking. brilliant.
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