Reviews for The Album
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 3/4/2007
Sad, I can really relate.

I don't like "It’s funny what memory does call", "When I laughed when I did fall" and "The answer in my heart does dent". You're using "does" and "did" as emphatic words when it seems that this type of emphasis doesn't fit here. It sounds like you're using those words for syllable structure, to make the rhythm better, when they don't really make sense. Do I make sense? I'm not sure.

Other than that, I like it.