|Reviews for i'm tasting you still|
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 7/14/2009
Simply perfect. Wonderful words, flow, rhythm,
I would love opinions on my work from a writer like you, it'd really mean a lot!
| none of burt's beeswax chapter 1 . 10/31/2008
simple and honest.
and for some reason, when i read the last four words, i felt an acute sense of loss.
| mostly water chapter 1 . 4/21/2007
The rhyming in this is so effortless it hurts.
Your first stanza is amazing. Just, amazing. The second one is pretty damn good too.
"you stutter my name, hesitating on the s,
and the Christmas lights fall, staples and
electrical tape falling loose, you shake,
i hold myself together, we fall apart."
This is what I want to see captured. The Christmas lights falling, and stuttering, and hesitation. This.
| shakeyourheaditsempty chapter 1 . 4/5/2007
Your words are beautiful.
| Her Wishing Well chapter 1 . 3/3/2007
Loved it, especially the second stanza with all the emotions portrayed in there, the way it actually makes you hurt - amazing!
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 12/20/2006
I really like the first stanza of this. You have some interesting and unusual images and it's very specific. I think "ice cold" is a bit cliche, but I realize it's hard to describe cold without reverting to ice. Nice work. Keep writing! :)
| les petits bateaux chapter 1 . 12/20/2006
i'm not sure what i should say about this. it's a whole mixture of emotions: malice, sorrow, enigma and the likes. it's a broken relationship relived, and revived. lovely.
| x account closed x chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
this was amazing and beautiful but oh god it hurts way down somewhere that the vodka won't even touch.
| poetic abortion chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
"i hold myself together, we fall apart"
Love that line. Just, Jesus, it was an amazing and beautiful line.
I love that line.
Oh, and the last line was gorgeous. Really; such a nice ending and, oh.
Sweet, sweet, SWEET.
| lackluster chapter 1 . 12/18/2006
i love the way the words unfold-like a storyline.
| dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 12/17/2006
'tis the fucking season, right, chica?
the words come back brittle and brazen as we are.
god, we're hurting.
i love the first stanza and the way it makes me ache.
| R. Sharmayne chapter 1 . 12/17/2006
Dammn that was good.