Reviews for The Second Apocalpyse
betalight chapter 1 . 12/19/2006
Interesting...I like the idea behind the story, and the descriptions you used when showing Rhilian's reactions to the modern time period, with cars and roads and police and all. There were a few errors, but nothing a good proofread wouldn't fix. If you ever feel like editing, I'd suggest slowing down the story a bit, as in expanding some of your descriptions or actions. Besides that, it sounds cool! Apocalypse, eh? I can tell this is going to be a pretty big project! I'll definitely be revisiting to read what happens next.