omg omg omg finally! i have been waiting forever for them to get together and it finally happens but what will happen after this? i mean candance has to totally bring down this wall this she has and let him in completely cause u can tell she had some serious feelings for him. and stephen needs to totally rethink this whole never wanting to get married or have kids thing again. cause they need to do both of those things. super great chapter! please update soon*beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg bge bge beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg*

she really shouldn't let the stupid things damon says get to her. she should only thing of the good things happening betwen her and stephen. she's always thinking of something sad and depressing to make her doubt herself with stephen when she should really look into the fact that eveytime she's told him that she didn't wanna have sex right now he'd always accept it and let it go or pleasure her when damon would yell and leave her ass for some other ass. great chapter but candance needs to be happy wiyh herself and the man who obiviously loves her. please update soon*beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg*

Sweet chapter, I'm glad that Hannah and Candace are getting along. I'm wondering when Damon's going to step back into the picuture, hopefully he won't screw things up too bad when he does.

That was a great chapter. I am glad you took it to a point and then showed that Stephen could slow it down and get to know each other. I also like how you handled the fact that Stephen is a single parent and if he is going to get tp know someone, it will involve his child.

I like this story so far. I get the feeling that Damon is going to become dangerous in the future, though. Also when you where describing Hannah first you said she had tawny hair (which is usually blonde or light brown in color) but then she has chesnut colored hair (which is a dark reddish brown) I don't know if this is a mistake but I though you should know!

Hey, your stories are really good. I just finished reading your other ones. Anyway I just started on this one and I just wanted to say that your are a really great writer, and thanks for updating your story I really appreciated it.

Ok let me just say how upset I was that Candace even thought of taking slimeball Damon back...let alone give him a second chance. He cheated at her house, in her bed, with one of her friends...enough said, he's gone for good. Candace just seemed a bit weak to accept all the crap Damon was feeding her.

It's about time Stephen made his move, lol...now I'm waiting for him and Candace to take it to the next level. He certainly ain't no Damon. And one thing, Stephen was giving T shady vibes when they went out. Now I don't think they've met before this night. So could it be that T was the girl Damon was kissing at the carnival, or was the whole bad mood thing really about his daughter?

you might want to put spaces or a line in between scenes, it's a bit confusinf switching from a scene with candace and damon to one with stephen and his daughter

woah... talk about sexual tension

i was so frustrated when i realized the next chapter wassnt up!

I am so ready to see what happens next. I know this isn't the last of Damon but it's nice to have a chapter without him. This was a good chapter, Stephen seems to be moving a little fast though. But otherwise it's good.

omg how can you just stop there! update update update*beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg*!

finally! thank you! i am so happy and now that she's rid of her crazy ex she has no worries and can get it on and crackin with stephen. great great chapter. please update soon*beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg*

Congratulations on getting my first review here, I hope we'll both enjoy this.

I am shocked, not because it's good realistic or whatever, it's mostly because of the large spectrum of qualities it presents. I find the positive points, as this story has some fine narration, but taking a closer look makes the perfect picture shatter to tiny pieces.

Should start by saying that the writing looks impressive. I could scroll down this chapter and see that you have both description and commented dialogue. That is a good thing.

I am more disappointed with the characters. Kind of stereotypical and plain. That does not seem to be a very good thing. If a fiction has nothing special to offer, what is its value? It is a grey mass, like a member of the crowd. Do you look at the crowd? No, you look up at the stage. Make sure you are at the stage, above the regular standards.

Words are flying, emotions are fizzing, but where is the feeling? I sense an antic here, a witty come-back there, copied off a wall, and some things I'd buy. With this spectrum you won't get far, I'm afraid.

Doubt the bits above will be quite helpful, as the comments were general by most part. One particular detail was a great annoyance, the pronouns. Those little words "he", "she" etc can make your life hell. In some paragraphs it's all right, but then, she, her, she, she, madness! When you phase into that grammar district, you start seeing each word in a flash, you notice the flaw and it starts irking you immensely. Reduce the amount of pronouns.

Another little detail would be the abbreviations. Perhaps, the culture allows you to shorten some words into capital letters, and you are free to do that in speech, but remember to never write an abbreviation "just because" without previously giving the full version of the words. That is a rule.

I am amused, but not amazed.

Have a nice, abuse-free day.

yay she broke up with the loser who doesn't deserve her! Now finally hopefully she and stephen can find a way together. they should really stop letting things like his daughter and her stupid ex be obsticals for them not to be together beacuse if they let it happen now when they're not together if they get together it'll be worst. :-( great chapter and thanks for breaking them up :D. please update soon*beg beg beg beg beg beg beg*

ooh i am so mad she took him back! : i mean he cheated on her, why would she take him back? she is so stupid if she can't see that stephen wants her and she knows she wants him. i mean everyone else can see it why can't she? i would've never got back with damon until she found if stephen really wanted her. ooh i am fuming! it was great chapter none the less but i am so mad she took him back! please update soon*beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg beg*