|Reviews for You Could Be Beautiful|
| punctured.lungs chapter 1 . 6/12/2011
I love this. Just the way it's written. The line "I want to go to that time or place, where you're beautiful and you're happy so I can be happy with you." Lovely.
| wonderfullysenseless chapter 1 . 9/6/2008
I read other people's comments, and I don't agree with them. This works with the words. Nothing needs to be understood fully; things can be complete in and of themselves in the way they were intended.
A single word can be more powerful than a novel.
| E. W. Chai chapter 1 . 8/15/2007
Very nice. I feel like I may need a stiff drink.
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 12/21/2006
I think this piece is craving stanza breaks.
Also it's very telling rather than showing, which in its current structure makes it read more like a short prose piece than anything else.
I think if you chopped this up into stanzas, introduced some imagery, some metaphor and helped the reader understand the situation more it could be really interesting.
Hopefully this was helpful.