Now that was a nice ending, very buzzy. I liked "The clip is now empty", that was good. I take it the way Jordan dies was a reference to the Silent Hill movie? If not, was similar and just as awesome.

Keep the writing rolling,

~Reaper

"Bang."

Very nice. Reminds me of Heroes...that was cool and plot thickening. So now the town is destroyed, there isn't much left. I like. Will the train be destroyed as well?

Keep the writing rolling,

~Reaper

Couldn't they just reload?

Anyway, good!

Oh god...awesome begining and ending of the chapter. I especially liked "The clip is nearly empty." Very nice. Wow, Seymour was totally out of it there as well.

~Reaper

Nice few chapters. /Death and terror – never ending until the clip is empty./ I still love that at the end of each chapter. Could you PM me and tell me what was up with the old man stabbing Thomas? It seemed totally out of the blue to me.

~Reaper

NO! JIGGINS! He had such a cool name! Oh, yeah...ad a good character. Love the wuite at the begining too.

~Reaper

P.S. Why was it so short? So short...like my neighbor.

Nice, very nice. Jiggins...what a name. Love it and the character. Ending wit regal was funny, everyone complains about blood on their shirts.

~Reaper

Jiggins is a great name!

Oh dude. I leave FP in sickness and pain and busyness, and when I come back, I get this. 6 chapters of awesomeness. I love how it's proceeding, and Tyrone is pretty cool. I love his reaction. “Wait, you want me to meet with three men who are plotting my death?”

Could it be put any better? I think not.

~Reaper

P.S. Haven't been around because I've been busy, sick and busy. Hell, I've barely had time or been able to write my own stuff.

This is pretty good. CONTINUE POST HASTE

If nothing else, "Death and terror- never ending until the clip is empty" is one hell of a catchphrase. But there is something else- a terrific story.

Nice. I liked the train breaking away, that was cool. However, I didn't get the mice. What was up with the mice? And since they're outside a house, shouldn't they be rats? (Scary Movie 3)

~Reaper

Your best work yet. Keep it up.

This is a very good beginning, I love it. Even the beginning was awesome, the great description of a slug...a sluggish slug.

~Reaper

Pretty good- like it more then the 4 warriors. Jessica was a nice touch- good to have at least one character to feel some sympathy for. But there wasn't enough random explosions! see to it.